Kayliana Report post Posted April 19, 2004 (edited) ... Edited May 8, 2019 by Kayliana Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lyanna Report post Posted May 14, 2004 Hey, Kayliana, I first heard this story through Prattler, and I was wondering if you'd consider making a couple of minor changes? 1) Correct the spelling of Aluwen's name. 2) Can you change the years that the Dragons were trapped for from 400 to a longer period of time - say 2,000 or 4,000? It strikes me as highly unlikely that they would be forgotten and the Palace reduced to ruins in such a short period of time. (That would only be, what...one generation of Elves? And the Draegoni would certainly remember...) -Lyn- Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kayliana Report post Posted May 14, 2004 (edited) ... Edited May 8, 2019 by Kayliana Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Learner Report post Posted May 14, 2004 Yes, but Prattler is using it in channel 111 Now I'll have to go change his text:!: Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Roja Report post Posted May 14, 2004 why can't you edit your posts? Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kayliana Report post Posted May 18, 2004 (edited) ... Edited May 8, 2019 by Kayliana Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Roja Report post Posted July 11, 2004 Hm I see a lot of good things in this story. I want to work in the dragon part for sure into the official EL history. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lyanna Report post Posted July 16, 2004 One last thing to change, Kay. Make the time that the Dragons were trapped an unspecified time, instead of the two thousand years I previously suggested. Say something like, "for millennia", or "throughout the years", or something of the sort. Probably better that way, since it doesn't fix us to a definite time frame, and synchronises better with the Age Timeline. We won't have to constantly re-edit it too, if there are any discrepancies in timing later. -Lyn- Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lyanna Report post Posted September 3, 2004 ...Saved! -Lyn- Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
freeone3000 Report post Posted November 1, 2004 (edited) I've been able to pick up a few small errors that maybe should be fixed before it is the finished history: Aluwen cherished all life[] as she -- "life, as she" roam [Eternal-Lands], the -- Eternal Lands with [Eternal] life, though -- eternal (unless it has a special meaning) body, knowledge, [magick], and a -- magic their [long-life], and -- longetivity of the [Eternal-Lands] there was war. Many -- Eternal Lands ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- Editing style: context context [error] context -- First edit In my siggy now. Dunno if that backwards-updates like post count. Edited November 2, 2004 by freeone3000 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Acelon Report post Posted November 2, 2004 Black should be capitalized. It was a specific dragon. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
freeone3000 Report post Posted November 2, 2004 Okay, Lord_vermor. I have repaired it. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
MisanthropicToo Report post Posted November 3, 2004 their [long-life], and -- longetivity It's longevity... not longetivity. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Kayliana Report post Posted November 4, 2004 (edited) ... Edited May 8, 2019 by Kayliana Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Lyanna Report post Posted November 4, 2004 All right then. I'm sorry you couldn't come back and work with us, Kay... Will remove both stories from the history, as requested. -Lyn- Share this post Link to post Share on other sites