Dark_Nightmare Report post Posted October 22, 2005 The Shade ******************************** The wind howled, the rain hissed, a night that would be quite hard to miss, a man walking down the street, not aware of the danger he might meet, for the streets were haunted by a traveling ghoul who came out at midnight to stalk on a fool. He'd jump from rooftop and creep to a window then he'd creep right in without a peep. He's steal what he wanted, then go out into the night. And dissapear with a billow of the wind. The man continued down the street, unaware of the shadow behind him, oh, he kept on walking down the street and then a flash! No more... Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Brom Report post Posted October 24, 2005 (edited) I like. This line just holds me from reading it clearly though. He'd jump from rooftop and creep to a windowthen he'd creep right in without a peep. I do not have any suggestions however. wait, perhaps I do. He'd jump from the rooftop and with a WReeek He would creep right in the window, without a peep. Tricksy Tricksy. No major spelling errors and any gramatical ones I do not mind because this is poetry Good work. Cant help it. want to add another suggestion. But this is your work, so reject them if you wish. He's steal what he wanted, then go out into the night.And dissapear with a billow of the wind. To He'd steal what he wanted, then go into the night. And dissapear with a billow of the wind, out of sight. Edited October 24, 2005 by Brom Share this post Link to post Share on other sites