The Shadow

[Dark_Nightmare]

The Shade

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The wind howled,

the rain hissed,

a night that would be quite hard to miss,

a man walking down the street,

not aware of the danger he might meet,

for the streets were haunted by a traveling ghoul

who came out at midnight to stalk on a fool.

He'd jump from rooftop and creep to a window

then he'd creep right in without a peep.

He's steal what he wanted, then go out into the night.

And dissapear with a billow of the wind.

The man continued down the street, unaware of the shadow behind him,

oh, he kept on walking down the street and then a flash!

No more...

[Brom]

I like. This line just holds me from reading it clearly though.

He'd jump from rooftop and creep to a window

then he'd creep right in without a peep.

I do not have any suggestions however. wait, perhaps I do.

 

He'd jump from the rooftop and with a WReeek
He would creep right in the window, without a peep.

Tricksy Tricksy. No major spelling errors and any gramatical ones I do not mind because this is poetry Good work.

 

Cant help it. want to add another suggestion. But this is your work, so reject them if you wish.

He's steal what he wanted, then go out into the night.

And dissapear with a billow of the wind.

To

He'd steal what he wanted, then go into the night.
And dissapear with a billow of the wind, out of sight.

Edited October 24, 2005 by Brom