Serving Selain

[FireEmblem8]

Serving Selain was a good idea...using him for my summoning needs--my art. Although I am a merchant of small, made, goods I have learned that completing my destiny is what I'm meant for. I'm just a wanderer...I have no point in the society of my homecity, Corren. Honing my "creation" skills is what I'm meant for, I guess...maybe soon they will realize I am an actual, true human being despite my past...

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My name is Sedos Indra. I recently received a name-change from Draban to Sedos, for serving Selain truthfully and becoming his bishop's apprentice in the art of summoning creatures. You may think I am some evil male human, but I was shaped this way by a great magician...I wrote a poem to further explain my life's story.

 

As new to these lands,

I faced many demands:

money, life, and making things with my hands;

but little did I know of this great man

that would soon crush my life's plan.

 

He was a divine wizard called Selain;

his name brought many pain.

They remember the ones, the ones he slain,

for the man had a skill, unique from all

to bring something back from it's terrible fall.

 

I heard of the legends, stories, and tales

and I learned that with my instincts, nothing fails,

so I began gathering helpless animal tails.

I devised a plan, a plan that would win,

but little did I know of my upcoming sin.

 

I searched the lands over and what did I find,

a little hopping creature that seemed so kind,

but I should have known not to trust my mind...

 

I killed the brown rabbit

and that became a habit.

Gathering items day after day,

just to find a way

for the needs I had to decay.

 

Little did I know of my feat,

of gathering 1,000 units of animal meat

for my master's mission to be complete.

And all of the materials were in

and it was time for Aluwen's defeat and Selain's win.

Edited November 18, 2006 by FireEmblem8

[Roja]

It's a nice little poem, but it raises some questions and is also a little confusing..

 

For instance, Selain isn't just a wizard, he's a god. So did you see him in a totally human form or something?

 

Also, the very last line, "and it was time for Aluwen's defeat and Selain's win" Sounds like there's about to be a big battle or something.

 

Another thing is as far as I know atm, there are no Bishop's, just the god's priests.

[FireEmblem8]

1. I refered to him as a wizard since I was talking about the past and he was a wizard before he was a god.

2. I figuratively refered to seeing him as seeing his capabilities and powers.

3. It was time for Aluwen's defeat and Selain's win was just saying that Selain now is getting more followers and the loss vs. win just shows that Selain is overpowering Aluwen.

4. I called the priests bishops since that is another for a priest, a more advanced title as well, and I interpreted this Eternal Lands language figuratively, like the whole poem is, and it was not meant for the story to be taken completely literally, but it was just showing that "I" was under the control of Selain and I was telling the reader the story. If the poem is confusing, I am sorry; I was just posting this to see if it was good enough.

Thank you for your time Roja,

-FireEmblem8

Edited November 18, 2006 by FireEmblem8

[Derin]

It is good, but you should give the input some thought.

 

I understand the "logic" behind Selain's win, but yoy should also remember a few things;

Selain is a god, so if you want the term wizard to mean something like a man that is good at something (cp. the term Pinball wizard), use perhaps "Divine Wizard", as in

"He was a divine wizard known as Selain"

 

You find a bit more information on Selain's floowing and temple here:

http://www.eternal-lands.com/forum/index.php?showtopic=29661

[FireEmblem8]

Thank you for the suggestions Derin and Roja. I changed the wizard to divine wizard for both you and Roja I hope this has the potential to become an official EL story.

Edited November 18, 2006 by FireEmblem8