Roja Report post Posted October 29, 2006 These Eternal Lands by foncEmerlin One day I awoke in a wondrous world Where magic is real and elves still roam Seen dwarves and gnomes walking hand and hand What is the name of this great land Seen human and orchan and I know dragons were here They have left their descendants for a Draegoni draws near I find it hard to believe after all only human here Just as I thought I had seen it all I met the fluffy bunny and took a fall Arrived in the underworld yes I did When I saw the great dragon skull I immediately hid After some time I found the exit and it was snowing again Cold and dark it was time to leave So I took a boat to white stone city Or as most call it WSC There's Gorlic and Frukas who sell books to me I stop by Raven's storage where a lot of my friends will be Where to go after WSC So many great places that needs to be seen Portland, Desert pines, Morcraven Marsh, and many more Some of them even I have never seen There are also secrets scattered here and there I think I could explore forever here Growing stronger and wiser with no end in sight Wandering these Eternal Lands Both day and night Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Aranka Report post Posted December 26, 2007 nice poem gives a good view of what EL is like, its simple and straight forward, and that is the strength of this poem I write poems too, and after some time i revise them, to see how they can improve. i think your poem would reveal its 'strength' even more if you could replace the rhyming words that are the same (for example: here& here, seen& seen) Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
