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  1. evtr - red witch story

    here goes the first chapter of the tale of the red witch I. In the distance the sun faded over the horizon, spreading a warm, rosy glow. As it’s last rays touched the landscape and turned the Vormus River into a golden mirror, some leaves rustled on the ground, moved by the wind. In the distance a soft, hummed melody floated through the air, and saturated its surroundings with a hint of mystery. The day faded away and the air grew cooler, a small fire was lit there, in that far off place, casting an orange glow against the darkened sky. Zoran sneaked up to the magic school’s outer door, carefully watching the ground, as it was scattered with bones and skulls of what once could have been orcs… or men... A cold shiver ran down his spine as he thought of what would await him if he got caught. He halted for a moment, and ran his fingers through his long black hair. “Concentrate, Zoran, concentrate.” he murmured softly. In a moment of hesitation he reached his hand into the pocket of his leather pants, to ensure his tiger summoning stones were still there. As he reached the school’s wooden door, his fingertips sought for the door handle, which felt ice-cold when he touched it. The door opened with a hesitating creak. He entered; his heart was beating like a drum, as he swiftly walked through the rooms, looking for whatever valuables were small and light enough to steal, and would bring him a bit of money to live from. As he walked deeper into the Magic School, he found in one of the more central rooms a pool with 5 strange blue orbs floating above it, looking as if they were enchanted and made of precious minerals. He stepped forward into the pool, and pulled one of the orbs out of the air, putting it in his bag. Suddenly a voice interrupted him: “What brings you here, stranger?” someone spoke, and from a shadowy corner a sorceress stepped forward, clearly unexpected, for Zoran was startled. Her gaze was piercing his thoughts when their eyes met, paralyzing him for the moment, for almost everything about her seemed to be in different shades of red; her hair, her eyes, her lips, her dress… all but her skin, that had the colour of creamy milk. In a haze of slight panic he threw a summoning stone in the water, that bubbled for a moment. The red lady killed the tiger he had summoned as quickly as lightning with powerful harm magic, which awed Zoran with silence. All the sudden he heard in the distance the sound of footsteps. He noticed the sorceress was alarmed; it gave a worried expression to her face. She walked around in circles for a moment, murmuring to herself in distress, thinking. “ Flee! Get out of here!” her voice trembled, and her hands were a bit shaky as she handed him the magical ring she had worn around her finger a moment earlier. Back on his feet and fully aware of the situation, Zoran took the ring from her hand palm, whispering a soft but charming: “ Thank you, fair lady.”, after which he dissolved into the air with a grin on his face, the dark blue orb still packed in his bag. Her heart was pounding so loudly at the moment the elder mages opened the door, that she could hardly discern what they said from her own heartbeat, pulsing deafening in her ears. The lady in red stood there dazed by fear, her senses were weakened, but she clearly felt the hard blow of the Eldest Mage’s words as they sunk into her consciousness. “Akane, your presence here is no longer wanted. Thievery is a serious crime. Because you are still young, consider yourself lucky to be treated so mildly. We have no wish seeing you here again.” he spoke severely, after which he teleported her out, and left her alone in the cold of night, before the stairs at the entrance of Palon Vertas’ magic school. A teardrop was rolling down her cheek, in her heart the pain of being rejected and a hint of relief struggled; her body softly shivering from the shock she experienced. She was free now, but she knew very little of the real life, life outside the magic school… (hopefully i will have the second chapter ready soon ) please feel free to comment/correct me greetings! Melisande
  2. evtr - red witch story

    I'm very glad you enjoy this story, I might write some more when i come back from holiday ( approx 2 weeks ) tyvm all for the compliments ^^- comments are always welcome ofcourse greetings, Aranka
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    you do have a point there, and i changed the part you mentioned I would appreciate it if you could comment less harsh though - LMFAO and ROFL aren't very encouraging really
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    And the very last part - suggestions are welcome .:~*~:. The wind rustled through the leaves, brushing her face softly, waving through her hair as she laid there, eyes open, motionless on the cave floor. She tried to recall the images that were suppressed in her mind, stuffed in a box and put on the top of a forgotten shelf, where she could not reach it. Eventually the pain would fade… “All will fade..” she murmured softly with a fragile voice. As time slowly ticked away, she became aware that she was lying there, waiting for it to pass her by, and claim her life too, eventually. Her hands were covered in dirt and her mouth was dry. A bit dazed she sat straight and looked around her with a faraway gaze in her dark red eyes. On the moisty, dark gray cave wall slid a small snake, and by the time it reached the green grass outside, she still sat there; numb, thoughtless. Like a drop carves its way through stone, awareness stirred her mind. She stood up, and washed her hands and face a bit further in the small puddle of water that was present in the cave. The movement of the cool water around her feet was very pleasant, but it went unnoticed. She pulled her feet away and stared into the puddle. After the ripples receded, a coloured stain appeared on the surface of the crystal clear water, and slowly formed Akane’s face. An obvious scar crossed her left eyebrow and eyelid, all the way past half her cheek. In a repulsive manner she traced it with her hand. A frozen, broken person stared back at her. Seeing herself like that contorted her face in a painful grimace, after which she grabbed the last crown of life and ran outside, into the forest. She scared a wandering fox as she passed it, and with her eyes closed, holding her head angled to the sky, she came to a halt as hot, lead tears welled up and left a burning trail on her cheek. “All I wanted..” she started whispering with a trembling voice, “ was No more, No more of this…” her voice swelled, and her hands were shaking as she made fists “Pain… rooting so deep inside me.” Her voice became deep and its echo created a very strange ambiance. She fell to her knees and slammed the magical crown into the earth; the blood of her fists staining it. For a brief moment in time, the wind held still and everything came to peace. To the eye nothing happened, but when winter passed and all the trees had shed their leaves, and all the stones were covered with snow, it is said Akane’s magic was absorbed in the new life that spring brought. As the dark winter nights passed, Akane could feel her pain, her perpetual desolation escape from her body bit by bit, letting go of the past that had harmed her so deeply. Her body felt lighter, more vivid, but her spirit remained broken. Her emotions were absent. When winter passed and spring arrived, the quartz formations that reappeared from under the snow had become soft pinkish red, rose quartz… many of the flowers were also tainted red, but what attracted the eye immediately after that winter was the colour of the leaves the trees carried. What was once a forest filled with green in spring, was now a crimson red forest with a piercing, ominous atmosphere. It seemed as if autumn never faded in the forest, as if time stood still there to capture the intense feeling of magic and the pain that lay hidden in its soil. When the trading routes reopened and became more accessible after winter again, travelled along the route to Irsis were shocked when they passed by… Among the village people rumours quickly started to spread of the Red Witch that had cursed the forest and its trespassers, for some traders had seen a cloaked women hiding herself when someone passed by, always dressed in dark clothes. She had deep red hair coming from under her hood , and a scarred face, incapable of smiling, unwilling to speak...
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    and another part - comments are always welcome .:~*~:. Akane woke and sighed as she heard Zoran and Souma whispering outside the tent. “How many of those crowns do you have left now, Zoran?” Souma demanded. “Just one actually.” Akane heard him reply hesitantly. “Don’t forget, you owe me a new ship, mate.” Zoran sighed and nodded. When they sneaked back into the tent, Akane pretended to be vast asleep, but kept on wondering why it was that bad luck seemed to follow them around ever since Zoran got his hands on those crowns. .:~*~:. Akane woke by the Souma’s screaming and yelling, and witnessed how the tent was slashed by a dangerously close rusty sword, and collapsed above her. Zoran panicked for a moment but quickly grabbed a stone and smashed it against the orc that was closest to them. Souma had drawn a middle-sized curved sword, and held out it ferociously out in front of her, swaying with it as if she was trying to scare wolves away with a torch. Yevhen nervously moved around Suraj, who was struck to the ground even before Akane was well awake. A puddle of blood drenched the soil around his leg, where he had a big cut. He moaned and cried, trying to move. Akane grew pale and her body trembled as she searched the ground for her leather bag, which had her magic sigils in it. Her heart lept in her throat and pounded loudly in her head every time she heard Souma’s sword swift in the air. Shield, shield, shield! She could hear herself think, picking up the sigils that were scattered under the tent, and trying to keep them in her hands; wildly shaking. As she held the sigils out and pushed them against the essences, a bright blue light appeared and quickly formed a pulsating bulb around Souma and Yevhen, who were facing the orc and tried to wound it in vain. “Get Suraj out of here, Souma!” Yevhen yelled as he pulled the swords from her hands and pushed her backwards. Zoran had managed to get hold of a dagger and placed himself beside Yevhen, with Akane behind them. “Akane, you can do more than this!” Souma yelled at her as she ran by and lifted Suraj on her shoulders. “Your harm spell Akane, your harm spell!” Zoran yelled at her, dodging the lethal blows the armed orc was making towards him. “Can’t find the damn sigil! I can’t find it, I can’t find it!” she muttered anxiously with an unstable voice, not quite sure if anyone had heard what she said. She ran around scanning the ground for the missing sigil, when suddenly she felt a rough hand grab her face and forced Akane to look upwards with a mean pull. Akane screamed at the look of the sinister, wild black eyes and instinctively smashed the orc against it chin before it could kill her. The orc groaned vicously as it released her and cut Akane in the face as she jumped away. Zoran had left Yevhen and rushed towards Akane, where a second orc had snuck in from behind and attacked. In a desperate attempt to end the game of jumping and dodging, Yevhen made a fierce blow to the orc that faced him, and succeeded. The blood dripping from Akane’s face made it hard for her to see where she had dropped the other sigils; she searched the ground with her hands as she shivered with horror and pain. Shield, shield, shield; Gods be damned! Where’s that bloody sigil! “Yevhen, watch it!” Zoran cried alarmed, when he saw another orc appearing from behind a rock and attacking him in the back. Yevhen’s cry went through the marrow, the shrill deafening sound of agony pierced the air, followed by the harsh sound of his body hitting the dusty ground. A large amount of blood started gushing from his shoulder and formed a dark circle on his clothing. “No!” Akane cried, her voice breaking in distress, as she had just picked up the last sigils from the ground. Noooo! She could hear her scream echoing in her head. Terror struck her face as she could see the orc heading for her now, approaching quickly, holding its sword out, eager to kill, eager to see blood. In an abrupt movement she smashed her hands together and a fierce, red tainted lightning smashed from the sky, striking the orc only a brief moment before its sword was about to land on her head, again. From the corner of her eye she could see that in the distance another orc had gotten hold of Yevhen and was dragging him away. Akane stared and hated herself. Only a brief moment’s time later they were already too far away to be even noticed to the human eye. Numb with terror, Akane turned around and saw Zoran struggling to keep the orc at a distance. Akane concentrated and prepared for another harm, but the very instant she was about to cast the spell, the orc anticipated her move and kicked her sidewards, causing her to fall down. “Aka-“ she heard, followed by a sinister, horrifying scream of pain; then a heavy sigh. A monstrous, shrill voice pierced her ears, the sound deafening and wild. Akane could feel an immense hatred boiling and biting inside of her, overshadowing her pain, her fears, her mind. The voice creaked and was saturated with terror as she could discern the hatemongering words it brought forth. It was but when Akane slammed her hands together with all her might, and when another fierce lightning thundered out of the sky, that she realised the voice she had heard was her own, contorted and broken. .:~*~:. Her heart leapt and froze when she saw his body, lying motionless on the dry, cold soil. Her body felt paralyzed, almost stunned when she forced it to move. As she ran towards him she felt the blood pulsating trough her veins, like barbaric war drums, louder and faster after every beat. She knelt beside him, and he groaned in pain when she laid her ear on his heart. His breathing was fragile yet quite noisy and went in fits and starts, like the galloping of a crippled horse that was desperately trying not to fall. How could this happen? This of all things? She could hear herself think. To fail in such a way... “I thought… we had a chance…” he tried to speak. “Hush, hush now.” Souma replied with an anxious voice, looking him in the eyes, her body trembling. “ The chance to advance…” he sighed in pain. “Forgive me.” No, forgive me. She tried to speak, but her throat was scorched with pain. The tighter she held on to him, the more he slipped through her fingers. In all her knowledge and magical powers there was nothing that could prevent life from fading. She stood powerless. His warmth started to fade the instant he exhaled his last breath; inside Akane something died with him, left her as she put her head on his chest. The longer she held him, the more his body felt awkward to hold, stiff and cold like a statue. Unwilling to leave him like he was, she felt her heart break as she knew that she didn’t have the means to give him a proper ceremony. She used her old robe, which she carried with her in a bag, to drag his body along; as Akane lacked the physical strength to carry Zoran. After some hours marching, she had gotten to the riverbed that split the bottom part of Emerald Valley in two, and sat by his body there for the very last time. Akane’s skin was pale and weary; she was visibly in a feeble state, yet determined to arrange Zoran a more or less worthy farewell. She cleaned up his face with the water, and stroked his hair, wishing she had more time with him. Off some dead branches and the fabric of her old dress, she tied together a small raft and laid his body on it. In the pocket of his pants she found a small pouch, containing bird feathers and life essences. A bitter smile hardened her face. He had used these feathers to summon the falcon outside the magic school. From the riverbed, she gathered some of the scarce and rather bleak flowers, and folded Zoran’s hands around them. Her body trembled in horror as she pushed him away, into the river. As she walked into the water herself, the cold feeling cramped up her muscles, but Akane was distracted by a far bigger ache. She reached for the pouch with feathers, and took out a falcon feather. After pressing it to her heart and lips, she summoned the elegant bird. It looked her in the eye, with an intelligent gaze, and she noticed the deep red sheen on its feathers. Akane stroked its head, and kissed it. You must be my eyes and my ears, my heart and my spirit. With you is everything I had to lose, fly with him where I cannot follow. With a gentle move she swayed her arm up in the air, and her falcon was gone; along with Zoran’s body, carried away by the river. In her hand she held the last crown that Zoran had managed to keep, and lose. Akane’s eyes stared into the distance, towards an invisible point while tears stained her dark crimson dress, and left small black circles behind. Around her laid a battlefield of broken bodies, carcasses of orcs and men that would soon begin to rot, as the stench of death was already present, so shortly after the battle. Silence prevailed the plain, but inside her she suffered desolation; her voice screaming in agony. Fate has a cruel way of smothering my dreams… she thought bitterly. As her gaze inspected the scenery, it truly had become a barren land, full of dust and rocks, and painful memories. A dead land. Darkness clouded her mind and drove her away. She could not remember how long she had marched when she got in this wide cave that, despite the small entrance, let pass a nice amount of natural daylight inside. Whatever happened in between these two points in time never seemed to have happened at all. A blank gap that left Akane empty, too.
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    And some more critiques are very much appreciated .:~*~:. As they travelled towards Emerald Valley’s rocky hills, only the jungle sounds and the saturated noise of their footsteps in the mud pierced the awkward silence. Hours would pass and occasionally Zoran and Akane whispered to eachother, but the athmosphere was tight and hostile. None of them was quite sure if it was the heavy journey through the jungle that caused it, or something else perhaps. The general mood was grim, especially since now that they were deep inside the jungle. As they continued, it became harder and harder to find food or suitable resting places, and the air grew denser. A notion of time was hard to keep; the thick leaves blocked out most of the daylight an prevented the circulation of fresh air. The air felt always moist and thick to move through, and the lack of natural daylight or change in scenery was enough to make anyone gloomy after whole days of marching. Akane would often gather herbs and plants along the way, and use her knowledge to make boosting drinks or compresses for small wounds and blisters. Making a fire seemed impossible; the wood was never able to dry enough. The mud and marshes were a tiring struggle to get past, and it often seemed as if they had passed the same places over and over again. .:~*~:. Suraj laughed in relief when he saw daylight pouring through the leaves and noticed the density of the bushes became much thinner just a few steps ahead. “Sweet Gods!” Souma cried, and the sparkle came back into her eyes. “You two are amazing!” she continued, ruffling Suraj’s hair and patting Yevhen in the back. Akane smiled and enjoyed the feel of fresh air against her cheeks; the sunlight on her pale skin. She looked back and noticed how Zoran’s expression relaxed a bit, although he had been very reluctant all this time. Their journey would continue north, where Emerald Valley became greener; where the villages were. Emerald Valley’s Barren Lands were dry and although the area was rather flat and easy to walk through after the mountainous border, the dusty wind and stale sun made it hard for them to travel the relatively small distance to a populated area. “How much longer?” Akane asked as the sky grew dark and it became chilly; rubbing her arms to warm up a bit. “Maybe it’s a good idea to call it a day.” Yevhen suggested, eager to sit down and rest a bit. Suraj quickly dropped his backpack on the ground, and started unpacking the fabric they used for sheltering; trying to make a subtle statement. “Yes, please.” Zoran said with a cracking voice; a feeble but honest smile curled around his lips. Akane turned around and looked at him, smiling back. She had almost forgotten the soothing sound of his voice, after the gloomy days that had passed. Suraj quickly set up an improvised low tent between two piles of rocks he had assembled, with on the fabric’s tips some rocks to prevent it from flying away. After Souma’s mumbled threats that anyone who would touch her would receive a punch where it hurt most, it grew quiet and all they could hear was the crying wind, and a bit later Suraj’s horrible snoring and some muffled giggling. Akane may still with her eyes closed and half asleep when she felt the touch of a warm body against her, and Zoran softly put his arm around her. She smiled secretively and fell asleep by listening to the relaxing pace of his breathing, the warmth of his arm around her; protective and loving.
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    Feel free to comment .:~*~:. Souma moaned and felt the daylight stinging as she tried to open her eyes. She tried to get up and felt two strong arms lifting her. “Had a nice rest?” Yevhen teased her, as he tried to get her up. “Cough for me Souma, you swallowed some nasty stuff I bet.” he said, gently hitting her back as she coughed it up. “For heaven’s sake” she muttered, “What more adventures will we come across? I’ve quite had enough I think. Imagine Dina’s face when she hears this.” Yevhen’s pleasant laugh made her momentarily forget exactly what had happened the night before, but she remembered the monstrous lightning all too well. She buried her face in her hands as she recalled the image of the ship burning, and all of them trying to save whatever was possible from its load. All she remembered then was the biting feel of the cold, black water and her body slowly giving up fighting against the creeping darkness; being dragged away in the current. Akane woke and inspected her body for more mosquito bytes besides the ones on her arms, where bruises started to show. A whole lot further by the river laid Souma’s ship on its side, stranded and severely damaged by last night’s storm: the sail was torn to shreds and covered with dirt from the stranding, a lot of the woodwork broken or damaged. Poor Souma... .:~*~:. Zoran sat by himself, staring with a blank gaze to the ground as he had put his arms around his legs. Steal of need or steal of greed… That was the question grinding in his head, making his body a numb piece of lead. I should’ve stopped at one…One would have been enough… Zoran thought, slightly panicking. He buried his hands in his hair, trying to hide his face at the same time as he could not believe what he had done to himself and the people he cared about. Losing the second crown while leaving the ship in the middle of the storm had been though to endure, but the realization that struck Zoran now, was beyond everything he had ever felt in his life. Coward that I am; I cannot tell her about it, or anyone for that matter. “He’s looking pretty gloomy, isn’t he?” Suraj pointed out, while poking with a piece of wood in the small fire they had started. Souma’s face was grim and weary. “He’s made a rather massive miscalculation, and is paying for it now... It better not be the bloody loss of that one crown that makes him mope like that. If we are honest about this, we all can acknowledge a very strange thing happened last night.” she muttered angrily. “And strange things don’t just happen like that either.” she added. “I think if Suraj, you and I gather our savings and save some items that were on the ship, we can maybe start over and rent a ship.” Yevhen tried, putting a comforting arm around her. “Yeah Souma, I’m sure we’ll find a way.” replied Suraj, his deep brown eyes carrying a hint of concern. .: ~*~:. It took several, long days for the impasse fade and for all of them to realise that even though they hadn’t quite gotten over what happened, it was time to change the sorry state they were in. Time to look ahead, as it seemed they still had quite a journey to go before they reached the nearest civilized area. Organising the party to provide for a sleeping place and food was a lot harder now that they were stranded in Kusamura jungle. Yevhen twisted the fumbled part of paper that was left from the map he kept in his pocket around, trying to determine their position. Souma curiously peeked over his shoulder, trying not to make any sounds, so he would stay focussed. “And, what does it say?” Akane informed carefully, as she laid a hand on Souma’s shoulder. “Well... We’ll have to head for Emerald Valley, that’s quite sure, but it might be tricky to get over the rocks bordering it. We’ll have to prepare as well as we can.” Suraj pointed at the packs of fabric they found at the riverbed, some days after the storm. “It’s not half the quality it used to be, let alone fit for clothing anymore, but I’m sure we can use it in some way. As a blanket, perhaps make carrying bags out of it, you tell me.” He explained optimistically. “Okay, let’s do this.” Souma added.
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    comments are welcome - made the corrections that were suggested .:~*~:. Souma’s piercing eyes wandered off to the distant horizon, her face hard and pale. As she scrutinized the sky she noticed the change of direction in the wind. Not good, Not good at all. She felt a warm hand on her shoulder, and turned her head swiftly to look who it was. “Souma, you shouldn’t look so angry at the sky, it’s all clear. Relax a bit, you’re scaring me.” said Suraj, curling his lips into a comforting smile. It’s not the sky… “You’re probably right.” Souma replied quietly. It’s the wind. Night fell, and Souma kept staring with her solemn face, in the distance, as the wind brushed through her hair. We may have another day, two perhaps. But the winds are catching up incredibly fast… .:~*~:. Akane wrestled in her sleep, the sound of water sloshing against the ship made her restless. Far off she heard a deep male voice yelling, overpowered by the roaring wind. “Take in the sails for gods’ sake!” Souma’s face turned pale and a sad expression marked her eyes as she saw one of the sails ripping. Dark clouds had gathered over Kusamura, and announced the coming of a storm, as the trees were bending under the power of the wind. The ship rocked abruptly here and there, hitting some small rocks or broken trees. Zoran woke abruptly, hitting his head because of the ship’s turbulence. As he hurried outside, he tried not to fall; stretching his hands out for walls and furniture to support him. “For the love of gods, what is happening Souma?” he yelled when he saw the dark sky hanging over Kusamura, and felt how the storm was making the ship steerless. “We’re in a bit of a crisis here, Zoran, please save whatever you can. We probably won’t make it with the ship still in a seaworthy condition.” she said sternly. “Well that’s no big problem, we’re only doing rivers, right?” he tried to joke, but Souma gave him a devastating look. “Don’t be such an ass and help a bit, will you?” “Souma, I’m sorry, I.. What happened? The sky was perfectly clear last night.” “Well…” said Souma ironically “In the distance there were some strange things going on, but overnight the weather changed and I guess it sneaked up on us while we were sleeping.” Her hair was clinging to her face, partially hanging down in black, soaked strings because of the rain; which made a loud, ticking sound on the ship’s deck. Souma angrily pushed some rope into Zoran’s hands and ran to the other side of the ship, taking a look at the damage. It’s your fault, and you know it, Zoran Worst of all, I knew it too. She thought bitterly. “No wind can go that fast…” Zoran murmured unaudible, and a tight feeling crept into his chest. Ask yourself stranger...
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    Previous part was adjusted, and here's another Feel free to comment - made the suggested changes .:~*~:. As time slipped by, Zoran and Akane had both gathered a small sum of money that was to pay them their boat trip to Aeth Aelfan, where they could sell the magical crowns Zoran had stolen and start a new life. Before Akane realised it all too well both she and Zoran became little yet infamous criminals in Palon Vertas, widely known for their cunning manoeuvres and decoys. Never had people heard of thieves who managed to pull off such tricks, and the strange thing was that these events only lasted for about two weeks. Most of the time Akane and Zoran would summon birds or other small animals, and send them to a store to distract the shopkeeper, resulting in quite a chaos. Whilst this was happening, Zoran would pretend to be a by passer who happened to see the whole commotion and came to offer help, while Akane cast an invisibility spell and quickly looked for money and other valuables. When they then both rejoined at the rendez-vous point Zoran’s eyes would twinkle and his happiness would brighten up Akane’s spirits; as bit by bit she came to forget her past life and enjoyed the new one. Her withered memories faded away; and secretly she dreamt of this new world she would discover, with Zoran. Life uncomplicated when she was around him; he had a way of putting things in such a perspective, that the crimes they committed seemed natural, and the longer she thought about it, the more she agreed with his point of view. They stole only what they needed, no fancy things. The people from who they stole often did not lack any money, having so much of it that they could easily live in the same luxury as they had before Akane and Zoran dropped by. Having become such infamous crooks in the neighbourhood; she wondered if what they did was really a crime. Not that it really mattered though, they would soon be forgotten, as they left for Aeth Aelfan. .:~*~:. Akane stood at the front of the ship’s deck, enjoying the sun on her face, smiling. A soft breeze blew through her hair, fluttering around her face. Aeth Aelfan, Home to the elves… Is it really as beautiful as they say? Zoran glanced at her from his shadowy corner, still somewhat worried about Souma’s strange reaction about this voyage. She had spoken to him in a strange, unexpected way, as if she could feel there was something not right about it; as if Souma somehow knew about the strange things that had happened while he was in that dark, magical room. Souma had a way of sensing risky business, she always had, but it troubled Zoran that Souma had sensed it this time, too… To his notion the worst part was already over, Or not… “Boo!” Yevhen had snuck up to Akane and gave her a little push, so that it seemed she had lost balance and was about to fall overboard. “Don’t fall, now.” He laughed, clearly pleased with his little joke. “You idiot!” said Akane a bit mad, but laughing; pushing him around with all her force. Souma grinned faintly as she saw Akane’s reaction, and watched how Palon Vertas faded away and the scenery made room for the more savage and wild view of Kusamura. To comfort herself, she thought of all the repairs and renovations she could make on her ship. A railing carved out of ebony wood, deck reparations, decorated sails even, if she felt like it. The sound of fluttering sails brought her mind at peace. Yet there was something telling her that it wouldn’t go quite like she wanted it….
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    all comments are welcome .:~*~:. The past few days Zoran’s jumpy reactions had not gone unnoticed by Akane. He looked tired and somewhat pale for his condition, as the exhaustion from that odd adventure ought to have worn off by now. Although Zoran spent many moments with her, talked about his past, and how he had lived of thievery all this time, Akane could tell by his eyes that there was something wrong… She didn’t find the courage to ask what spooked his mind yet, however. Day after day it became more obvious to her; Zoran had a hard time pretending nothing was bothering him. Slowly Akane realised that the events that occurred had a strange, somewhat depressing effect on the people that surrounded her. Since yesterday Souma was not the cheerful person Akane knew when he she met her. Suraj and Yevhen sometimes grew quiet at the dinner table; only Dina seemed to notice none of it and continued her daily chores as usual. Akane walked outside; the wind blew her hair backwards and despite the gray weather she felt a sort of peace in going outside. Wandering around in a slow yet equal pace helped to clear her mind; concentrating on the rhythm silenced her thoughts. Sitting at a small table near one of the windows, Zoran had seen Akane go outside and decided it was now or never. He would share his mistrust and uneasiness with her, as he could not bear it much longer. He walked outside and waited for about an hour or two, not far from the tavern, on a little wooden bench. It seemed like an eternity had passed during that time. As he closed his eyes and buried his face in his hands, his elbow leaning on his legs, he recalled so many memories and felt more than ever that he had failed on so many people…. failed his life too… “Hi there!” he heard Akane’s warm voice say and saw that she sat next to him, watching him in a caring way, “Is everything alright?” “Akane…” he replied a bit uneasy, “You really caught me off guard there…” “I did, didn’t I?” a warm smile curled around her lips, but her eyes were asking the questions she was afraid to ask…. What has been going on these last days Zoran?... Why is it that you sleep so much and yet your body is still craving for more rest… What is it that you are so afraid to tell me that you seem to wear a mask before me to hide it?... “Do you feel better yet?” she asked, softly touching his cheeks and forehead with her hand to see if he was feverish. Zoran sighed deeply and closed his eyes as he gave a little kiss on Akane’s hand whilst it stroke by his cheek. “I’m not sure how I feel really, it’s complex… I can’t really determine what exactly causes me to feel so strange…” “Your face is cold Zoran, you didn’t have to wait outside for me that long…. I would’ve come inside sooner or later you know.” Akane said smiling, but a somewhat sad tone in her voice showed how Zoran’s words didn’t go unheard. Zoran looked down and a small grin appeared; some of his long black hair fell across his face although it was always bound together. “I guess you could say I feel… uneasy…. Just by being here… in this place… under these circumstances….” “After what happened…” Akane added softly, staring in front of her. “I can’t stay here Akane… It reminds me of how poorly I lived my life all these years… what a failure I am…” he explained, looking at the grass to hide his eyes from her. “I see…” “I talked to Souma and she agreed to take me and my belongings as far as Aeth Aelfan, for a decent price… Please understand, but I cannot stay here… I cannot live like this anymore…”. Zoran looked into Akane’s eyes and saw how they contradicted the expression on her face, trying not to give away any emotions. “The only thing I have to take care of for now is paying a part of the costs to Souma in advance….” There was a short silence before Zoran continued, “Have you considered the possibility of joining me?” he asked, knowing there was not much else he could offer her. Please come Akane… I need you…. Akane turned her head away for a moment and sunk away in her thoughts. Her long red hair hung over her face, softly hiding its expression. There is not much left for me here… nowhere to go, nothing to do, no life to lead.. What will you do here on your own? “Yes. I’ll come with you.”
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    Here's another part; comments are very welcome! .:~*~:. Zoran spent a few days resting, but also thinking on what was to happen next; for he knew he didn’t feel like staying in Palon Vertas any longer than was needed, after what he had been through. When he was alone, trying to rest, Zoran could hear the voice echoing in his head; not constantly, but when it did he felt a strange shiver running down his body, squeezing his heart together, reminding him of his crime. Ask yourself stranger… .:~*~:. Zoran walked downstairs and saw Souma sitting at one of the wooden tables in the tavern, eating some bread with cheese on it. His head was still a bit weary as he didn’t get a good night’s sleep and it was still early in the morning. There was a candle lit on Souma’s table, and some oil lamps on the counter, which brightened the room up only a little, with a faint glow of orange light. As Zoran sat in front of Souma, he could see how she smiled, but her eyes were questioning him. “You’re up early…” “Yes I have trouble resting properly lately… But you’re up early yourself too.” Souma grinned and nodded softly. “Being in Palon Vertas again after all these years reminds me of what it used to be like… Adventurous, exciting… There was a whole world to discover back then… and now that I’m older, I find it harder to stay in the same places… I try to find the old Palon Vertas back, but it looks like its gone forever…” said Souma, smiling in sad way. Zoran was caught off guard; this was not something he had expected of Souma, this kind of nostalgia… “Seeing Palon Vertas as it is now has made me restless…” “I always thought you were happy to get away from here Souma… seek for bigger adventures elsewhere….” replied Zoran. “And I ended up doing ship transports hehe…” she said laughing, “Well it’s just this nostalgic whim; don’t worry about it. As soon as I am on the water again it’ll go away and I’ll feel better.” Zoran smiled at Souma, but at the same time felt guilty for what he was about to ask her. “Souma… there’s a favour I need from you really…” “What is it?” Souma asked curiously. “I need transport out of Palon Vertas; I got myself into awkward position here and it would be best if I disappeared for a while… there’s a possibility Akane will come along too…” he said uncomfortably. “Wait a minute… what is it exactly that you did?” Zoran hesitated to reply, and wondered if it was wise to tell Souma the whole story. “I eh… I got 3 crowns off the magic school that need to be sold, Palon Vertas would be way too risky… I was thinking along the lines of Aeth Aelfan?” “For Aluwen’s sake! This must be the most idiotic thing you’ve ever done! Are you seriously thinking you can get away with this? Stealing enchanted crowns off the mages?!?” she hissed at Zoran. “Please Souma… you must help me… I only did it as a way of repenting for all the trouble I got Akane in. And when I’m able to sell the crowns, I’ll never have to lead this sort of life again…” Zoran explained. Souma ran her fingers trough her hair and kept a stern expression on her face; her eyes were hard and somewhat cold. “I will help you get to Aeth Aelfan, Zoran, but realise you are bringing the lives of my crew and myself in danger with your crazy plans… You are going to have to pay us, pay us well….” she said severely. “Name your price, Souma…” “I want 2000 gold coins in advance… and 15 percent of what you get from selling the crowns…. And realise, Zoran, that I am really being nice here…” she replied. “I will get you the money soon, Souma. The gods bless you for your kindness.” Zoran replied, happy with the thought that soon he would have a whole new life… all he had to take care of now was getting 2000 gold coins for Souma, and then his real life would begin.
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    ok thanks
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    I do appreciate your comments alot, as they are often things i didn't think of myself that still need changing and improving. To make your critiques 'fit' in the story, I changed some things starting from 3 posts ago (so it would be more consistent as you pointed out; and less of those coincidental solutions provided by the side characters.) here is another part, i highly appreciate all the critiques .:~*~:. The bright sun gave a warm feel to the dark clothes Zoran was wearing, softly spreading throughout his body, which made him feel lazy and relaxed. “Well Akane… I know I haven’t been away for too long but there are some things I would like to talk to you about… Importa-” Akane stared at Zoran in big disbelief, tightly holding the little wooden bench they sat on. “What do you mean? Not that long? ” she interrupted him, clearly excited by the matter, “You were gone for 8 whole days!!” “I’m sorry?” he replied, not believing what he had just heard, his eyes somewhat squinting together. “You had me worried sick!” she yelled in the heat of the moment; not knowing whether she was angry with him for staying away so long without a warning, or happy as he had finally returned. “Good gods…” he murmured, a bit nervous and struck with awe. His eyes wandered off to his hands, which he observed carefully, as if he had suddenly gained years and they had wrinkled. Akane felt sorry the instant she had raised her voice at Zoran, and with a sad face she turned towards him and said: “I’m so sorry, I really didn’t mean to be shout at you like that…” “It’s ok…” he replied with a soft smile, “But I swear I was only gone for about a day, Akane… I don’t know how this is possible… I just can’t….I don’t know… I can’t understand it myself…” Akane looked at him with regret, because she saw an honest look in his eyes; knowing that he hadn’t lied to her. “But where have you been then? I can’t think of any places that have a distortion of time or contain such powerful magic.” Akane asked him curiously. Zoran looked away from her as he hesitated to tell her where he had gone and what he had stolen. Akane could discern a hint of shame as he turned his head from her and the expression in his gray-blue eyes faintly changed. Zoran told Akane about the small storage house the magic school had, not too far from where they were, and how he had managed to break into it and steal some of the crowns that were there. Akane was surprised, for she had never heard of the storage place before, and had no idea of the powerful magic that was locked inside it. “Without doubt, that is the strangest thing I’ve ever heard…” Akane said amazed, “and reckless! Imagine what could have happened!” Zoran grinned and replied: “But think of all the things that suddenly become possible when these crowns get sold. I estimate there will be enough money to buy you a house and food supplies for the rest of your life… It can widely compensate for the mess I’ve made in your life, and in mine…” Akane was a bit startled at first, ignorant of the price that people were willing to pay to get their hands on a crown of life, but soon began to dream away with the thought of a nice quiet life in a different region of Irillion. A small garden and a cosy wooden house, close to a village center with friendly people… “I knew you’d be happy. If you don’t mind I’ll go back inside and rest a bit… I’ll rejoin you again later this afternoon, but at the moment I am still tired and my knee could use some rest too.” said Zoran relieved, as he saw her daydreaming with a vague smile on her face, and gave her a tight hug after which he walked back to the tavern, which was only a moment of walking away. Akane laid down on the wooden bench, and spent the rest of her afternoon dozing in the sun, with her new, fresh clothes on; now and then humming the melody of a song she had learned as a child, but of which she had forgotten the lyrics long ago.
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    and another part please feel free to comment .:~*~:. Zoran felt a great relief when he could discern some lanterns that stood around the tavern and lit it up from a distance. The idea of returning to a civilized place where these incomprehensible adventures didn’t seem to exist, gave him strength. He quickened his pace although his knee caused him a lot of pain. Zoran walked with a limp towards the entrance door, and as he came closer he could almost feel the warmth of its cosy rooms, almost taste the great stew Dina always makes, almost smell Akane’s perfume when she came near him…. .:~*~:. Akane turned her head quickly and dropped her fork on her plate as she saw how Souma’s mouth dropped wide open and her blue-green eyes focussed on the entrance door, loudly creaking. “Good gods, boy! What happened to you?” Dina cried. In sheer amazement, Akane froze as she saw that Zoran had returned, holding a torn leather bag in his hands. His face and clothes were stained with mud and dirt, and parts of his shirt were torn from scraping against branches in the forest. His face however, made a poorly revealed grin as he saw the look on Akane’s face. The two men from Souma’s crew, Suraj and Yevhen, rose from the table and walked towards Zoran to greet their old friend. “Well well, Souma.” said Zoran, widely smiling, “I had no idea you were in town! Long time no see, isn’t it?” “You’re quite right about that Zoran, although I didn’t wish for you to go through so much trouble just to see me, you know.” she replied with a grin around her lips and a friendly twinkle in her eyes, referring to the state Zoran was in. “If I see what adventures you risk your neck for, I am glad I switched businesses quite a while ago…” Souma continued, winking at Suraj and Yevhen, who burst into a laugh and helped Zoran further in. “I am only joking, Zoran…” Souma added to her last comment, “it’s always nice to finally see an old friend again.” All this time Akane had remained silent, giving her mind the time to realise what happened. Zoran sat down at the table, and Dina rushed back into the kitchen to fetch him a plate of the stew she had prepared. “I-I’m glad you came back Zoran.” she said softly, with her head turned down, as Zoran sat in front of her. “As am I, Akane….as am I….” he replied, gently smiling at her. “You missed him, didn’t you?” grinned Yevhen, seated next to Zoran. Akane’s head turned red, and her heart leapt into her throat as she grew nervous. “But you missed our Zoran too, now didn’t you, Yevhen?” she heard Souma say in a provocative way, and Suraj almost spit his water back out as he was trying not to laugh. The rest of them were loudly laughing, including Yevhen, who gave Souma a soft punch on the shoulder. The evening grew late, and Dina made clear that everyone should get themselves a nice night’s rest. As Zoran tried to get up as well, Akane made a sign he should stay a bit longer and said: “Wait a moment please, let me help you a bit.” She went to her room, and a few moments later she returned with a small pot of herb paste she had mixed together, and a piece of old fabric. Zoran smiled at her and didn’t regret for a moment he had gone through all this trouble. Akane tended his knee with the herb paste and the towel, and helped him to get upstairs. “Akane, thank you very much.” Zoran said softly. “Go rest a bit, please. We can talk tomorrow. With the herbs, your knee should get alot better these next few days.” Akane replied quickly, not allowing Zoran to say anything more. Zoran after her, his eyes wandering from her fiery red hair to the dark ruby tunic she wore. Oh so beautiful….
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    I corrected the previous part in green again, and this is the new part comments are very welcome, that way i can correct greetings, Aranka. .:~*~:. Akane woke by the smell of grilled meat and spicy herbs. The smell hung in the whole tavern, as the innkeeper was busy cooking a rather fine meal. Akane stretched her legs and turned around a few times before she climbed out of bed. As she was about to dress herself, she noticed the stains on her clothes and the stale smell they gave off. “I’ve been wearing this for quite some time now…” she murmured to herself, realising she had no spare clothes with her she could wear while washing her red dress. A bit uncomfortable with her appearance, Akane walked downstairs and made her way to the dining room of the tavern. To her amazement, the innkeeper had prepared a whole table of fine cheeses, meat and several sorts of bread for breakfast. “Ah you woke miss? I hope we didn’t make too much noise last night.” said the innkeeper in her heavy manner, while she wobbled out of the kitchen and tried to grin kindly at Akane; yet her face pulled a rather strange grimace. “So new guests arrived yesterday?” asked Akane curiously. “Oh yes miss, Souma and her crew arrived yesterday night. Very fine people, miss. In fact I’m sure they can provide you some new clothes, your dress does look as if it could use a nice cleaning, if I may say so.” “Yes you are right about that…” said Akane ashamed. “Now don’t you worry about it, I’ll make sure Souma gets you some new clothes, she just returned from a trading mission in Idaloran you know. She does all sorts of jobs with her boat…. Lovely girl, our Souma…. Now what’s your name miss, if I may ask?” “Akane.” she said softly. “Ah well, if you need me you can just call me. Oh, and when you see Souma, you may want to tell her Zoran was here a few days ago, huh? They're old friends, and i'm sure she will be happy to stay around and see him again after all this time... I’ll be in the kitchen for now.” said Dina, the innkeeper, clearly more energized and friendly since Souma’s arrival. A bit helpless and suprised Akane stood still for a few moments, but then decided to go out and see if she could find a good bathing spot. After walking aside the riverbed for a few moments, avoiding the thorny bushes, she saw a vague figure in the distance, sitting on a rock between some low bushes. Akane approached and saw that the tall woman sitting there, was combing her long black hair and stared back at Akane, smiling. “Hi.” she said, softly grinning and trying to hide the amused expression on her face, now seeing who they had woken the other night, “I am Souma. I just arrived here last night. You must be Dina’s guest?” Akane was a bit confused, and replied hesitatingly: “Y – yes. My name is Akane.” “I'm sorry we were a bit noisy yesterday.” said Souma gently. “Don't worry about it.” Akane replied, more at ease, “ Ehm… Dina asked me to tell you Zoran was here a few days ago...." Another smile curled around Souma's lips as she thought of how nice it would be to see her old friend again. “Ah yes, Zoran. I used to do business with him alot when Palon Vertas had a more blooming commerce... But the past few years we had more demand elsewhere and Palon Vertas seemed to have grown emptier and emptier. I wonder how he is now though...” I wonder too... thought Akane. "Souma, can I ask you something? Do you by any chance have a set of spare clothes i could borrow? They would come in handy while I wash these and bathe...." "Well..." said Souma hesitating, "I guess I can help you out, I still have some robes left on the ship.... Yes I think I have some nice things there for you." Souma smiled as she saw the muddy hem of Akane's dress, and wondered how anyone could wait that long to look for new clothes. "Thank you, Souma. I will make it up to you." "You're a friend of Zoran, I'll be happy to help you out. I will leave the clothes on this rock for you." Before Akane could say anything, Souma ran off with an elegant leap, her long black hair fluttering behind her. As her body touched the cool but pleasant streaming water of the Vormus river, Akane closed her ruby red eyes. She let her head sink under the light blue water and heard how her heart was peacefully resonating in her ears. Akane tried to clear her mind after her bad night’s sleep, but it seemed the harder she tried to let go of her worries, the heavier they clung to her. A whole week… You could be anywhere in the world and I am still here, waiting… like an idiot…. Waiting for you… Where are you, Zoran?
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    ok i edited the parts in green again about ponderous: i think i must have misinterpreted from the dictionary then, as it was in the list of the word i looked up tyvm for your commenting
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    the next part please comment so i can correct it, thanks .:~*~:. It grew dark outside; Akane couldn’t see as far in the distance as she could before and decided to head back. As she lit her torch and made her way back to the little tavern, she cast a last glance at the horizon, hoping he would return soon. Her face was paler than usual, ghostly white in the light of her torch’s flame, and she looked as if she’d been through some sleepless nights. “Five days…” she murmured, “ and you still didn’t return…”. Return to me…. Akane had quickly grown weary of sitting outside all by herself, worrying more each day she had no news of Zoran. It struck her as odd that even though they were strangers, she felt a strong connection to him, as if a part of her already knew him. Not a day went by where she didn’t wonder what on earth he was doing and when he would return. She knew they have had little chances to meet as normal people would, but somehow it tied her more to him. Zoran had, unwillingly, opened her eyes to a whole different world…. She had a life of her own now, she was as free as any person would want to be… Free to feel…. As another evening went by, Akane found herself awake at night, thinking about what could have happened to Zoran… While she held her eyes closed, she could discern the creaking of the tavern’s wooden door on the floor below her. A moment later she heard the grumpy murmuring of the innkeeper, followed by her clumsy, loud footsteps as she walked down the stairs. Akane groaned at the nuisance, and kept tossing and turning in her bed. A muffled sound of voices reached the second floor. Akane became more and more agitated with the commotion, and squeezed her pillow in frustration. As if it wasn’t bad enough already, the door was opened again in loud excitement, and slammed with the needed energy to drive Akane mad, as she was desperately trying to forget her worries and catch some sleep. The innkeeper squeezed her eyes a bit as she saw two strong men standing at a table; one of them having a hard time trying not to laugh. "What can I do for you boys?" she said sternly, obviously bothered by the fact that she had been disturbed in her sleep. "Well?" she said again, as neither of them answered. The entrance door creaked again, and a grin appeared on both the faces of the men that stood before the innkeeper A tall woman walked inside, her boots clacking on the solid wooden floor. Elegant and swift she pulled her hood down. “Souma!!!” she heard the innkeeper yell enthusiastically “it’s been long since you visited, hun!” followed by her bellowing laugh, "I should have known it was you, dear!". Akane moaned; her face buried in the pillow she squeezed with all her might. Downstairs Souma smiled softly at the innkeeper, and gave her a wink. She walked around the room a bit; her black hair lighted dark violet in the dim light of the oil lamp she held in her hand. Her dark eyes stared at the ceiling as she heard a soft noise, coming from the second floor. “You should’ve said you had a guest, Dina.” whispered Souma with her pleasant, mysterious voice. “Sounds like I’ve awakened her…”, Souma grinned. "Well its an odd situation really..." Dina replied mysteriously, "Zoran brought her here some days ago and pays for her lodging..." "She knows Zoran?" asked Yevhen, one of Souma's companions, as they were all surprised to hear that name again after such a long time. “Well yes, i don't know the details though....Now off to bed with you! Have you got any idea how late it is?” ordered Dina, after which she gave Souma a tight hug and sent her upstairs, together with the other two men of her crew. .:~*~:. Zoran’s heart pounded loudly in his head. His body felt unwieldly and he clearly sensed a cool stinging feeling running through his muscles. He struggled with the bag at his side, moving slowly in an uneven tread. The cold wind rustled through the trees and pierced his clothes with ease, stiffening his weakened body even further. His knuckles coloured white as he firmly tightened his grip around the rope with which he had bound the bag together again. His eyes felt extremely weary; and his sight blurred a bit. Damn it… damn it, damn it, damn it! “Come on, get a grip” he groaned as his knee collapsed and the bag landed in the mud. Zoran crawled back up and continued his way back to the tavern, where he had left Akane…. The moon shone bright and lit the forest with its silvery rays. Small drops of rain formed a strange composition resembling pearls and thread in a spider web. He felt the little cold drops being absorbed by his shirt, touching his skin and sending shivers down his spine as his body rustled against the leaves. I can be there by morning if I keep it up….
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    ok, thanks for this correction I edited the mistakes in the original post, and put it in green what i changed (to avoid posting the same chapter over and over and over for every spelling/grammar mistake i make) greetings, Aranka
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    I expanded and rewrote the last chapter a bit; taking in account the critiques that were mentioned - i hope this 'fits' better .:~*~:. Good gods, what are you doing?! he heard himself think when he stood before the entrance of the little building across the other side of the Vormus river, where the magic school hid a series of rather valuable supplies. Doubts crept into his thinking as the crucial moment came closer and closer. - If you pull this off… you will never have to worry about money again…. This goes a little beyond my habit of taking only what I really need and what others can miss..... It could turn out to become a too big theft for a small thief like me… As Zoran put on the magically protected leather gloves he carried with him, he felt a small sensation creeping into his body, sharpening his senses and awareness. He had heard of many small thieves, people just like him, trying to break into this small supply room. Many of them didn’t get further than the small lock that was placed on the entrance door. It was said that those who dared to touch it without the Gods’ protection would lose their hand as a punishment and mark of their crime. Zoran’s hands were a bit shaky as he placed the picklock into the keyhole, carefully listening to the sound of the metal bars unlatching, which held the door closed. Once in a while he felt some of the heat that escaped from the lock go through his gloves which caused him to halt. After a lot of trial and error, he discerned a loud ‘click’ inside the wooden door’s lock. - So far, so good…he thought, as he sighed softly . After drinking some invisibility potions, Zoran entered the small building; a cave carved inside of the mountain’s rocks, consisting of one single room with some old bookshelves. While walking further in he felt a strange atmosphere inside it. People often told tales that the Elder mages of the magic school had cast a curse on this place, and with it cursing every stranger that laid a finger on their relics. Somehow those people never seemed to know what kind of curse it would be, or what happened to those that had trespassed there earlier. - Complete nonsense of course… Those who don't venture, don't win. He walked past a fountain, which held a statue in the middle, and saw many little gold coins spread over the mosaïque at the bottom, most of them rusted. Walking further in, he halted before a shelf that displayed several magical crowns, whose power seemed to light up the room a little. He opened his bag and put his leather gloves on, but hesitated…. - If they needed these… why would they keep them so far away from their main training building? It could be just a temporary storage, the books look pretty dusty but not a single speck on the jewellery rack… The jewels are pretty new it would seem… The longer he waited, the more doubt played tricks on his mind, as his thoughts got caught in a push and pull game. - The items aren’t that unique … look how many there are here, and how poorly they are secured. If they were so valuable to those mages, they would certainly be looked after better than this… It’s just not right to place such a weak protection… Something must be wrong… He turned his face to the ground and for a moment he seriously considered the consequences of his deeds. If he would steal these items, his life would change for good… But in what way? I could take only one or two… and leave the rest…. One or two would be enough… - That is all it takes to start a completely new life…. In a different place, with the right means and the will to change, you really can become a different person…. It’s possible to escape your fate Zoran…, but you must grasp this chance while you still can…. Zoran sighed as he knew the decision he was about to make weighed heavy on his conscience. - You cannot solve the problems of the world by doing this, but you can solve your own to start with… and stealing these items will hardly harm anything or anyone but the magic school’s pride, if they even notice at all. His mind was full of tormenting questions; despite the fact that the magical items and the jewellery stored here was poorly protected and multiple times present, the atmosphere that befell him as strange earlier, grew darker as he waited and stalled the moment of truth. - Besides… you owe Her a debt too…. “I will do this…” he said to himself, whispering, “But only so I will never have to do it again.” The air in the room thickened and grew heavy as he pulled the first crown of life from the bookrack. His hand tingled and itched softly as he pierced the glittering curtain that hung around the bookshelf, coming from the combined energy of the crowns. Some of the sparkling faded each time one of the magical crowns was pulled from their rack. Soon Zoran’s hands began to tremble as the light inside the room had sharply faded and his eyes just seemed to refuse to adapt to the darkness that hung around him. Quickly he pulled out one last crown, and hastily made his way to the entrance door, which was barely visible across the other side of the room where he was standing. Along side of the entrance door a soft shimmering glow welled up and cast a dark atmosphere as a large skeleton became visible, behind it blue crystals casting the sudden light. A voice arose and spoke sternly, as if from a distance: “ There are those who steal of need and those who steal of greed… Ask yourself stranger, which of those you are…” the voice halted for a moment. Zoran was struck with awe and felt his body changing into lead; paralysed with sudden fear. In his head he heard the echoes of the voice that just spoke to him; pounding like a hammer : ‘ Ask yourself stranger…’ ‘Ask yourself… Stranger…’ In the aftermath of fading echoes, the air in the room was pulsing, creating a gloomy yet magical athmosphere. “ In the end, all are united beneath the same sky, yet only you can decide when your time will come…. May the Gods be with you.” Zoran trembled as every muscle in his body refused to obey. His face became pale and his eyes widened; feeling like an animal staring into the face of death. The air around him became thick and hot, making it hard for him to breathe. With the power he had left in his arms and hands, Zoran tightened his grip around the leather bag in which he carried the crowns, almost paralyzed. His bag became heavier as he tried to make his way out. It seemed as if every present element tried to prevent him from making a terrible mistake, yet Zoran fought for all he could, feeling exhausted and gasping for air as he pulled the door open and set eyes upon the outer world. Just as the door opened on a quarter, a ray of dim moonlight lit up a dusty inscription in the floor at the exit. ‘He who leaves this room without thinking twice about what he takes Shall leave his second chance at life behind.’ His bag dragged on the ground, weighing tons and tons as Zoran pushed the door open widely and pulled at the leather bag, which was almost tearing, with all his force. The bag was almost fully outside as the dazed feeling that befell him earlier started to wear off. A second chance at life… What does that mean? - It’s just a text to scare thieves off, as the voice you heard inside was just an illusion created by the mages. He who leaves this room without thinking twice about what he takes Shall leave his second chance at life behind… Zoran murmured to himself as he gave one last pull. The sturdy leather bag tore under the tension and magical resistance that held it back. Zoran fell over and witnessed how one of the crowns rolled back inside, followed by the deafening sound of the entrance door being slammed and an aggressive screeching of the metal lock. The door had locked itself in a most unexpected fashion, leaving Zoran outside, bewildered, with around him the two remaining crowns that rolled out of the torn leather bag. it would be nice if i got some comments and tips again - i do my best to write 'quicker' but i must add that i am in a far busier schedule with school than i originally tought i would be, greetings, Aranka
  21. Removing rule 5 (multiplaying)

    Not sure if this is possible; but EL could be programmed so that only 1 client per computer can run (at the same time)?
  22. Removing rule 5 (multiplaying)

    very good point : if people aren't tempted by the possibility they won't do it. in fact leaving the trade system as it is would be +- asking for people to do IP trades, because if it is forbidden, why is it possible to do it? ;/
  23. I make signatures for the forum Signatures 100% designed by Melisande (=> no 'recycling' other images) (exceptional copyright-free cliparts used for image) A signature costs 2K-3K (Never more), the money goes to Dao guild. (you may donate more if you wish ;P) some examples: http://www.lucidmirage.be/signatures.html please note to mention color and +- description of what you like on the sig (please no images, hard to do ) OR you could just say make me something in color 'x' and leave the choice to me also note that depending on how much succes this is it takes some time to make a signature (yes, even one) greetings, Melisande <edit> forgot to mention something shop is closed, All services become unavailable as of hence. ty for understanding.
  24. Signatures for sale - cheap and home design

    shop closed - no more orders/editing/contacting will be accepted as from now on. Melisande/ Aranka is not responsible for hosting your images, please do not complain it was removed - i am also not retrieving the images for you anymore, same with PSD files. most of the images you can still retrieve here : http://www.lucidmirage.be/signatures/signatures.html - but no promises; (told everyone clearly to host on photobucket or imageshack - hate to say i told you so ) have a nice day , Melisande/Aranka
  25. evtr - red witch story

    ok I made the edits to the parts that were previously commented (thought better not to re-post everything so that the thread would not grow way too long for no good reason - maybe its better for me to repost the 'good version' as a whole in the end) this is the new part, please leave comments so i know what needs adjusting or re-thinking .:~*~:. Good gods, what are you doing?! he heard himself think when he stood before the entrance of the little building across the other side of the Vormus river, where the magic school hid a series of rather valuable supplies. Doubts crept into his thinking as the crucial moment came closer and closer. - If you pull this off… you will never have to worry about money again…. This goes a little beyond my habit of taking only what I really need and what others can miss..... Zoran entered the small building, a cave carved out of rocks, consisting of one single room with some old bookshelves, and felt a strange atmosphere inside it. He walked past a fountain, which held a statue in the middle, and saw many little gold coins spread over the mosaïque at the bottom, most of them rusted. Walking further in, he halted before a shelf that displayed several magical crowns, whose power seemed to light up the room a little. He opened his bag and put his leather gloves on, but hesitated…. - If they needed these… why would they keep them so far away from their main training building? The longer he waited, the more doubt played tricks on his mind, as his thoughts got caught in a push and pull game. - They aren’t that unique items… look how many there are here, and how poorly they are secured. If they were so valuable to those mages, they would certainly be looked after better than this… He turned his face to the ground and for a moment he seriously considered the consequences of his deeds. If he would steal these items, his life would change for good…. I could take only one or two… and leave the rest…. One or two would be enough…. - That is all it takes to start a completely new life…. In a different place, with the right means and the will to change, you really can become a different person…. It’s possible to escape your fate Zoran…, but you must grasp this chance while you still can…. Zoran sighed as he knew the decision he was about to make would determine the course of his further life; afraid of the life he embarked upon. At what cost must you refuse the chance to alter your own destiny? How much damage can you create in order to ensure your own happiness? - You cannot solve the problems of the world by doing this, but you can solve your own to start with… and stealing these items will hardly harm anything or anyone but the magic school’s pride, if they even notice at all. Zoran’s mind was full of tormenting questions; despite the fact that the magical items and the jewellery stored here was poorly protected and multiple times present, the atmosphere that befell him as strange earlier, grew darker as he waited and stalled the moment of truth. - Besides… you owe Her a debt too…. “I will do this…” he said to himself, whispering, “But only so I will never have to do it again.” The air in the room thickened and grew heavy as he pulled the first crown of life from the bookrack. His hand tingled and itched softly as he pierced the glittering curtain that hung around the bookshelf, coming from the combined energy of the crowns. Some of the sparkling faded each time one of the magical crowns was pulled from their rack. Soon Zoran’s hands began to tremble as the light inside the room had sharply faded and his eyes just seemed to refuse to adapt to the darkness that hung around him. Quickly he pulled out another crown, and hastily made his way to the entrance door, barely visible across the other side of the room, where he was standing. He felt a great relief when the cool nightly air brushed his face and made his breath damp around him. He shut the door quickly, as if he were afraid that strange feeling would escape from it and chase him. Zoran ran his fingers through his hair, and slowly started to realise exactly what happened, for doubt and anxiety blurred his thinking earlier. Carefully he opened his leather bag again, and a soft, lightly warming glow escaped from it. Zoran grinned as his eyes scanned the 3 crowns, decorated with precious stones and crafted out of solid gold or silver. Comforted by the thought of a better life, he walked back to the forest at Palon Vertas’ mountain border and wandered off into the night.
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