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Ok judges here is your thread!

Below you will find the authors name, and under that you will find the titles of their entries. Please use Lyanna's mark system.

 

4 areas:

5 marks - Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc.

5 marks - Originality/Creativity

5 marks - Style/Skill-at-writing

5 marks - Judge's Bias/personal liking.

 

 

THIS THREAD IS FOR JUDGES ONLY!

This means

Lord_Vermor

Roja

Aisllinn

Quinticus

EWQ222

 

Anyone posts not from a judge, lyanna, or myself will be immediately deleted. If there are any concerns please forum PM me.

 

Zoki:

Dream Come Truth

The Attack at Tarsengaard

 

Ttlanhil:

Reporting In

Pineapplebob

Enchanted Jewelry

A Rabbits Life - Poem

Refelctions at the Meditation Pool - Poem

The Buzzin Bumble Bee - Song

 

Sirrobin:

The Bunny Who Could - Poem

What of the Foxes - Poem

 

Cho_Yun:

The Curse of the Castle

Eternal Lands Poem - Poem

Rivan Warriors Poem - Poem*

*Poem is below the story

He is Just a Noob - Song

 

 

Ogle:

A poem, A poem - Poem

 

 

Razia:

Gemlight Still - Poem

The Ballad of the New Player - Poem

 

 

Jezzabelle:

Just a Little Poem - Poem

 

Greeknight:

Whitestone City's Clash

 

Wildcard:

Shivar's Poem - Song/Poem

 

Changeyourname:

The Path of a Warrior

 

Damned Angel:

Night of the Shadowcaster

 

Foncemerlin:

I Have Your Bag At Beam My Friend - Poem

These Eternal Lands - Poem

 

Derin:

An Exerpt From the Truescrolls

Lodge of Land

 

Spruit:

The Creature Who Wanders Around Whitestone - Poem

Mother Nature - Poem

 

Alderan:

The War of the Valley

Eternal Lands Pwns - Song

The Monster of the Ghealan Sea

 

CrusadingKnight:

A Look at the Gods and the Overdiety

 

Furzwei:

Word of the King - Poem

 

Kalhan:

For Love and Honor......Ode of the Warrior Maiden - Poem

 

Monkeyki:

Kalenthro the Troll Slayer

 

I believe that is all of them. You merely have to click the link to go to the thread. No nasty searching (and yes it was...trust me :) ). If i left any off the list, Please FORUM PM ME!

 

Finally I am looking for one more judge. Saii, Korhil, Placid, Wytter, Lachesis, Hazor, if one of you guys have the time and are willing please post here. I want to remove myself as a judge since i was the one taking donations for prizes and some came from contestants. I want this to be as impartial as possible.

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I'd feel honored to judge in this contest, however I have to stress that my knowledge of English language is quite limited.

 

With regards

Lachesis

 

P.S. This is Wytter's last week at the army, so maybe he won't find much time the next days (I'll ask him as soon as I see him online). Since Roja warned she would have little time as well, I think extending the judging period by a second week would be a good idea. Additionally, it was proposed to split the work up among judges, so if this is planned please post the grouping as soon as possible, so that the respective artworks can be read at first.

 

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EWQ's format for convenient copy & paste (slightly edited for better reading):

 

[u][b][/b][/u]

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: [i][/i]
Originality / Creativity: [i][/i]
Style / Skill-at-writing: [i][/i]
Judge's Bias / personal liking: [i][/i]
[b]Total: [/b]

Comments: [i][/i]

Filled out, it looks that way:

Title

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 4

Originality / Creativity: 5

Style / Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 2

Total: 14

 

Comments: I really liked the part about "B.A.N." but it could do with some more time into it.

P.S. The board definitely needs tables.

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Finished, I loved reading these all, we have some real talent here :huh:

 

Wildcard's:

Shivar's Poem - Poem

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 3

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Total: 14

Comments: This was the perfect anwser to Shivars relentless comments about "Make a Shivar story/poem/song"

 

 

Foncemerlin:

I Have Your Bag At Beam My Friend - Poem

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 4

Originality / Creativity: 5

Style / Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 5

Total: 18

Comments: Ahh, discriptions of helping newbies, you are a preceptive one.

 

These Eternal Lands - Poem

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 5

Originality / Creativity: 5

Style / Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Total: 19

Comments: Excellent good work!

 

 

Derin:

An Exerpt From the Truescrolls

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 4

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Total: 16

Comments: Good explaination of the overdiety. :P Ive always liked the name Bane.

 

Lodge of Land

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 4

Originality / Creativity: 5

Style / Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 5

Total: 18

Comments: A good way to tie together summoning, leaving no loose ends.

 

Alderan:

The War of the Valley

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 3

Originality / Creativity: 5

Style / Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Total: 16

Comments: You are a young writer, this is very good work for your age B)

 

Eternal Lands Pwns - Song

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 3

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 3

Total: 11

Comments: Eh, it could use some more work :) but not a bad poem.]

 

The Monster of the Ghealan Sea

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 4

Originality / Creativity: 5

Style / Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 5

Total: 18

Comments: Ahh, one of the best stories. Excellent work, Im buying the rights to your first book you publish.

 

 

sirrobin

The Bunny Who Could - Poem

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 4

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Total: 14

Comments: After editting done by Saii, one of the best :) if the score does not reflect.

 

What of the Foxes - Poem

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 2

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 3

Total: 10

Comments: a little more editing would be good, but a lovely poem nevertheless.

 

Cho_yun

The Curse of the Castle

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 2

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 2

Total: 11

Comments: Some good editing and I say this is one of my favorites too. I dont know

the story of Lord and King Vermor as much as I would like to compare, but good story.

 

ttlanhil

A Rabbit's Life - Poem

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 5

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 3

Total: 16

Comments: This would be the perfect prequel to "The Bunny who could"!

 

Reflections at the meditation pool - poem

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 4

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Total: 16

Comments: I feel more could be put into this, you have he skill, but you did not use it.

 

The Buzzin Bumble Bee - Poem

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 5

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 5

Total: 18

Comments: Loved it! not many songs, but a put a little tune to it in my head, really quite enjoyable.

 

Ogle

A Poem, A Poem

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 4

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 3

Total: 13

Comments: Ahh, the days when IP had no snow. I think those days may be back soon.

 

Kalhan

For Love and Honor... Ode of the Warrior Maiden - Poem

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 5

Originality / Creativity: 5

Style / Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 5

Total: 20!

Comments: If I could pick one to win it all, this would be it. Excellent Kalhan!

 

Greeknight5

White Stone City's Clash

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 3

Originality / Creativity: 2

Style / Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 2

Total: 10

Comments: "We mustnt try to solve our problems violently. There are many other ways to solve them.

" - A worth goal and task.

 

Changeyourname

The Path of a Warrior

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 4

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Total: 15

Comments: "I laughed, I cried... It moved me Bob!" Im a sucker for a good love story, but it did need some editing

and may I offer some advice, when you write, try not to make your writing sound like everyday speach, because commonly in everyday

speach we use inproper grammer and sentences that do not flow so well. Good work!

 

DamnedAngel

Night of the Shadow Caster

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 4

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Total: 14

Comments: For english not being your second language, very good indeed! Try to keep with the exsisting Gods stories however :)

 

crusadingKNIGHT

A Look at the Gods and Overdeity

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 5

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Total: 18

Comments: Excellent explaination of the insights from the inside of the Gods.

I dont see why this one was not just accepted immediately, :)

 

furzwei

Word of the King

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 2

Originality / Creativity: 2

Style / Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 1

Total: 7

Comments: It needs some work. You used a different rhyme scheme AABBA rather than the usual AABB or AABBCC.

but it lacks in coherancy and flow.

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Yes, if you provide a format for us to follow, I think that wil be helpful for us as judges and the person who tallies up the scores.

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The formal version that Brom (EWQ222) posted would be preferred, but if you really don't have time, you can just give a raw score out of 20.

 

Oh, and thanks for pointing out the link problem, Brom. I edited Quint's first post to correct it. The "Dream Come True" link now leads to the correct story.

 

-Lyn-

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Sorry for my delayed response. My DSL at home is giving me trouble. A few things:

 

First, Shivar's poem (the second one) as been removed. So now only the clickable one will show up.

 

Second, please use the formal format that Brom provided. Also it would be a great help, when you make your marks, if you would edit your posts instead of making a new post each time. Since every judge will only have 7 entries, i think it will make the formal doable. Also any comments you would like to leave, would be greatly appreciated (but its not necessary..

 

Thirdly, i would very much like it if each story could be marked by every judge, BUT we're all busy people. I will be splitting it up. This will make things easier on everyone, and also it will eliminate the problem with my taking contest donations from entrants. I will simply place those entrant's stories in the care of another judge.

 

Give me about 10-20 minutes and i'll have the list posted here.

 

Lord_Vermor please take:

Ttlanhil's:

Reporting In

Pineapplebob

Enchanted Jewelry

A Rabbits Life - Poem

Reflections at the meditation pool - poem

The Buzzin Bumble Bee - Poem

Ogle's:

A Poem, A Poem

 

Roja please take:

Sirrobin's:

The Bunny Who Could - Poem

What of the Foxes - Poem

Cho_Yun's:

The Curse of the Castle

Eternal Lands Poem - Poem

Rivan Warriors - Poem

Zoki's:

Dream Come Truth

The Attack at Tarsengaard

 

Aisllinn please take:

Cho-Yun's:

He's Just a Noob - Song

Razia's:

Gem Light Still - Poem

The Ballad of the New Player - Poem

Kalhan:

For Love and Honor......Ode of the Warrior Maiden - Poem

Greeknight5's:

Whitestone City's Clash

Changeyournames:

The Path of a Warrior

Alderan's

The Monster of the Ghealan Sea

 

EWQ222 please take:

Wildcard's:

Shivar's Poem - Poem

Foncemerlin:

I Have Your Bag At Beam My Friend - Poem

These Eternal Lands - Poem

Derin:

An Exerpt From the Truescrolls

Lodge of Land

Alderan:

The War of the Valley

Eternal Lands Pwns - Song

 

Quinticus please take (oh...thats me ;)):

DamnedAngel's:

Night of the Shadow Caster

CrusadingKnight:

A Look at the Gods and the Overdiety

Furzwei:

Word of the King - Poem

Jezzabelle's:

Just a Little Poem - Poem

Monkeyki:

Kalenthro the Troll Slayer

Spruit:

The Creature Who Wanders Around Whitestone - Poem

Mother Nature - Poem

 

That's 7 entries per judge. As it works out there's 4 poems and 3 stories per judge.

 

If any judge is inclined to feel biased against any one of their entrant's stories, please let me know so i can shuffle them around. If you have any problems please post them, and i will get to them as soon as i can. Its memorial day weekend so i won't be able to post in any depth until tuesday. So i'll read the stories. I suggest each judge takes the time to read each story through once before you do any judging, but it's up to each of you individually.

 

If there are any ties, or if the judges feel it is necessary, i can make a poll after the individual judging for the entries in question. We'll cross that bridge if we get to it, though.

 

HAVE A GOOD MEMORIAL DAY WEEKEND! I'll be checking in as often as i can.

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Hmmm, I just thought splitting it might cause problems because one judge might be more "strict" than another, i.e. one would give more and another less points even if they'd have the same opinion about the artwork. Maybe we should give guidelines about the meaning of the different ratings (0-5 points)? And could we at least have two judges for a certain artwork, after all at least one quarter of the total rating is purely depending on the judge's personal liking. The effort put into the artworks deserves to be honored, so IMHO it would be less severe if the judging took longer than if it would be badly balanced.

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Yes, I thought so too, Lachesis. In fact, a minimum of three judges would be better. Okay, here's a revised list (sorry to overturn your work, Quint... :D:()

 

Lord Vermor

- Reporting In (ttlanhil)

- Pineapplebob (ttlanhil)

- Enchanted Jewelry (ttlanhil)

- A Rabbit's Life - Poem (ttlanhil)

- Reflections at the meditation pool - poem (ttlanhil)

- The Buzzin Bumble Bee - Poem (ttlanhil)

- A Poem, A Poem (Ogle)

- The Bunny Who Could - Poem (sirrobin)

- What of the Foxes - Poem (sirrobin)

- The Curse of the Castle (Cho_yun)

- For Love and Honor... Ode of the Warrior Maiden - Poem (Kalhan)

- White Stone City's Clash (Greeknight5)

- The Path of a Warrior (Changeyourname)

- The Monster of the Ghealan Sea (Alderan)

- Shivar's Poem - Poem (WildCard)

- I have your bag at beam my friend - Poem (foncEmerlin)

- These Eternal Lands - Poem (foncEmerlin)

- Just a little Poem - Poem (Jezebelle)

- Kalenthro the Troll Slayer (monkeyki)

- The Creature who Wanders around White Stone - Poem (spruit)

- Mother Nature - Poem (spruit)

 

 

Roja

- The Bunny Who Could - Poem (sirrobin)

- What of the Foxes - Poem (sirrobin)

- The Curse of the Castle (Cho_yun)

- Eternal Lands Poem - Poem (Cho_yun)

- Rivan Warriors (Poem)

- Dream Come Truth (Zoki)

- The Attack at Tarsengaard (Zoki)

- A Rabbit's Life - Poem (ttlanhil)

- Reflections at the meditation pool - poem (ttlanhil)

- The Buzzin Bumble Bee - Poem (ttlanhil)

- A Poem, A Poem (Ogle)

- He's just a Noob - Song (Cho_yun)

- Gem Light Still (Razia)

- The Ballad of the New Player - Poem (Razia)

- An Exerpt from the Truescrolls (Derin)

- Lodge of Land (Derin)

- The War of the Valley (Alderan)

- Eternal Lands Pwns - Song (Alderan)

- Night of the Shadow Caster (DamnedAngel)

- A Look at the Gods and Overdeity (crusadingKNIGHT)

- Word of the King - poem (furzwei)

 

 

Aislinn

- He's just a Noob - Song (Cho_yun)

- Gem Light Still (Razia)

- The Ballad of the New Player - Poem (Razia)

- For Love and Honor... Ode of the Warrior Maiden - Poem (Kalhan)

- White Stone City's Clash (Greeknight5)

- The Path of a Warrior (Changeyourname)

- The Monster of the Ghealan Sea (Alderan)

- Eternal Lands Poem - Poem (Cho_yun)

- Rivan Warriors (Poem)

- Dream Come Truth (Zoki)

- The Attack at Tarsengaard (Zoki)

- Reporting In (ttlanhil)

- Pineapplebob (ttlanhil)

- Enchanted Jewelry (ttlanhil)

- Shivar's Poem - Poem (WildCard)

- I have your bag at beam my friend - Poem (foncEmerlin)

- These Eternal Lands - Poem (foncEmerlin)

- Just a little Poem - Poem (Jezebelle)

- Kalenthro the Troll Slayer (monkeyki)

- The Creature who Wanders around White Stone - Poem (spruit)

- Mother Nature - Poem (spruit)

 

 

EWQ222

- Shivar's Poem - Poem (WildCard)

- I have your bag at beam my friend - Poem (foncEmerlin)

- These Eternal Lands - Poem (foncEmerlin)

- An Exerpt from the Truescrolls (Derin)

- Lodge of Land (Derin)

- The War of the Valley (Alderan)

- Eternal Lands Pwns - Song (Alderan)

- The Bunny Who Could - Poem (sirrobin)

- What of the Foxes - Poem (sirrobin)

- The Curse of the Castle (Cho_yun)

- A Rabbit's Life - Poem (ttlanhil)

- Reflections at the meditation pool - poem (ttlanhil)

- The Buzzin Bumble Bee - Poem (ttlanhil)

- A Poem, A Poem (Ogle)

- For Love and Honor... Ode of the Warrior Maiden - Poem (Kalhan)

- White Stone City's Clash (Greeknight5)

- The Path of a Warrior (Changeyourname)

- The Monster of the Ghealan Sea (Alderan)

- Night of the Shadow Caster (DamnedAngel)

- A Look at the Gods and Overdeity (crusadingKNIGHT)

- Word of the King - poem (furzwei)

 

 

Quinticus

- Night of the Shadow Caster (DamnedAngel)

- A Look at the Gods and Overdeity (crusadingKNIGHT)

- Word of the King - poem (furzwei)

- Just a little Poem - Poem (Jezebelle)

- Kalenthro the Troll Slayer (monkeyki)

- The Creature who Wanders around White Stone - Poem (spruit)

- Mother Nature - Poem (spruit)

- Reporting In (ttlanhil)

- Pineapplebob (ttlanhil)

- Enchanted Jewelry (ttlanhil)

- Eternal Lands Poem - Poem (Cho_yun)

- Rivan Warriors (Poem)

- Dream Come Truth (Zoki)

- The Attack at Tarsengaard (Zoki)

- He's just a Noob - Song (Cho_yun)

- Gem Light Still (Razia)

- The Ballad of the New Player - Poem (Razia)

- An Exerpt from the Truescrolls (Derin)

- Lodge of Land (Derin)

- The War of the Valley (Alderan)

- Eternal Lands Pwns - Song (Alderan)

 

 

 

That gives each judge 21 entries to consider. I know it's a lot... but spread out over a week, that's just 3 a day... thanks for you patience and effort. :)

 

-Lyn-

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Lyanna,

Thanks for making the adjustment. In all my hurry, with everything going on before the weekend i thought it would be best to assign entries in a way that was suited more towards everyone's busy schedule. In the 8 hour car ride to where i was going, i thought that it probably wasn't a good idea. Thank you for coming up with solution.

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The Bunny Who Could - Poem (sirrobin)

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 2

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 3

Total: 10

 

Comments: I think it's a start to a potential cute little story. It needs more work though, no only in the grammar but also in the creativeness of the writing. It kinda reminds me of Petercottontail. If a story such as that was written it'd be neat to have children's stories in the game too :P

 

What Of The Foxes - Poem (sirrobin)

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 3

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 2

Total: 10

 

Comments: I think perhaps some more creative wordings would have worked better. I'm no expert on poetry, and although I like the idea of the poem I just think the choice of words doesn't sound right in most places, and the feeling of the idea behind the poem is just not there.

 

 

The Curse of the Castle (Cho_yun)

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 2

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 3

Total: 10

 

Comments: My favorite part is when they give the crown to the Vermor ghost :P But the whole story itself needs a lot of work in grammar, spelling, punctuation, writing flow and how the story and dialogue sounds. What the people say and how they say it matters quite a lot. The characters need a personality about them, and the author can achieve this by using the write style of wording for their dialogues.

 

 

Eternal Lands Poem - Poem (Cho_yun)

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 2

Originality / Creativity: 2

Style / Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 2

Total: 8

 

Comments: Needs work on grammar again, and choice of wording. I think it sounds more like a poem for the people on the other end of the computer, than something that would be written as an Eternal Land's inhabitant if that makes sense :)

 

 

Dream Come Truth (Zoki)

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 2

Originality / Creativity: 1

Style / Skill-at-writing: 1

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 1

Total: 5

 

Comments: Try to be a bit more creative in your writing. Also, read what you write and see if it makes sense the way you wrote it. I don't know if your first language is English or not, but it needs lots of work.

 

The Attack at Tarsengaard (Zoki)

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 1

Originality / Creativity: 1

Style / Skill-at-writing: 1

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 1

Total: 4

 

Comments: #1. Get yourself a spellchecker. #2. Learn to spell words properly, use grammar, and try to get a better hold over the English language. #3. Read lots and lots of books. This will help you greatly to learn how to write and spell words.

 

A Rabbit's Life - Poem (ttlanhil)

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 5

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 3

Total: 15

 

Comments: Good job at some humor on the life of a rabbit :)

 

 

Reflections at the meditation pool - poem (ttlanhil)

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 5

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Total: 16

 

Comments: I like this one a lot! I can see it fitting in very well in the game :)

 

 

 

The Buzzin Bumble Bee - Poem (ttlanhil)

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 5

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 3

Total: 15

 

Comments: Cute song :)

 

 

A Poem, A Poem (Ogle)

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 3

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 2

Total: 10

 

Comments: Use punctuation, also try to make your poem/story more interesting to read.

 

 

He's just a Noob - Song (Cho_yun)

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 3

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 2

Total: 10

 

Comments: Use punctuation. You must have had a bad noob experience, well we're working on that ;P But RTFM!!! st00pid n00b :) hehe j/k

 

 

 

Gem Light Still (Razia)

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 3

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 3

Total: 12

 

Comments: Use punctuation. It's a nice little poem for crystal caves..not much else to say here.

 

 

The Ballad of the New Player - Poem (Razia)

 

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 4

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 3

Total: 13

 

Comments: You should spell out White Stone & Valley of the Dwarves, I think it sounds better that way.

 

 

 

An Exerpt from the Truescrolls (Derin)

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 4

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Total: 16

 

Comments: I like it with the exception of a few things: I think the name Bane doens't sound too god-ish :) Maybe that's just me... Also, "Brotherhood" I assume this is referring to all the good gods? If so that word doesn't fit either, as it refers to all males, and Aluwen is a female. "The Great War" wasn't the beginning to evil in the world, unless you speak of a different great war than we already have?(written by Tumaros)?

 

 

Lodge of Land (Derin)

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 5

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Total: 18

 

Comments: I like this a lot! I will have to talk to you more on it though soon..as I also wrote something on summoning(how it works type deal/some history), so we should try and combine them or something. Well I'll speak to you later on it :)

 

 

The War of the Valley (Alderan)

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 4

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 3

Total: 14

 

Comments: This one is pretty good. I like hte overall style of it, the dialogue and such. But I think the biggest draw back is that it's a little hard to follow, I didn't know what race you were talking about in the beginning, and also in some parts throughout. I think the story needs a little more depth too, the characters more personality and "character" :)

 

Eternal Lands Pwns - Song (Alderan)

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 4

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 2

Total: 14

 

Comments: lol..kinda funny but I think you need better choice of words and rhyming schemes.

 

 

Night of the Shadow Caster (DamnedAngel)

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 4

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 3

Total: 14

 

Comments: This is an interesting basis for a more indepth story. I like the name "Shadow Caster" a lot, I just think the story needs to go further for it to work well. And I'm not expert at sciences and such..but doesn't antimatter simply destroy matter? So why would it hide the crystals as you wrote in the 2nd paragraph?

 

A Look at the Gods and Overdeity (crusadingKNIGHT)

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 5

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 5

Total: 19

 

Comments: Great job, I love it! It would work really well in a book in the game.

 

Word of the King - poem (furzwei)

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 3

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 2

Total: 10

 

Comments: Well the rhyming scheme seems to be a bit messed up. You could use better choise of words and get rid of the RL things like "lagg" and "bot" and turn it into a real poem-story..that would make it better I think.

 

 

Eternal Lands Poem - Poem (Cho_yun)

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 3

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 3

Total: 11

 

Comments: Well I like the story-poem aspect a lot, but again, it needs more work to be a better piece of writing.

 

- The Bunny Who Could - Poem (sirrobin)

- What of the Foxes - Poem (sirrobin)

- The Curse of the Castle (Cho_yun)

- Eternal Lands Poem - Poem (Cho_yun)

- Rivan Warriors (Poem)

- Dream Come Truth (Zoki)

- The Attack at Tarsengaard (Zoki)

- A Rabbit's Life - Poem (ttlanhil)

- Reflections at the meditation pool - poem (ttlanhil)

- The Buzzin Bumble Bee - Poem (ttlanhil)

- A Poem, A Poem (Ogle)

- He's just a Noob - Song (Cho_yun)

- Gem Light Still (Razia)

- The Ballad of the New Player - Poem (Razia)

- An Exerpt from the Truescrolls (Derin)

- Lodge of Land (Derin)

- The War of the Valley (Alderan)

- Eternal Lands Pwns - Song (Alderan)

- Night of the Shadow Caster (DamnedAngel)

- A Look at the Gods and Overdeity (crusadingKNIGHT)

- Word of the King - poem (furzwei)

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POEMS/SONGS

 

He's Just a Noob -(Cho-yun)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 2

Style/Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 2

Total: 10

Comments: No punctuation. It also feels like it should have had a tune to be sung along with. Too generalized, I would have liked to have had some more depth to his "problems".

 

Gemlight Still -(Razia)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 4

Style/Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 4

Total: 16

Comments: Very good at making me "see" Crystal Caves. Good use of descriptive words.

 

For Love and Honor...Ode of the Warrior Maiden -(Kalhan)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 5

Originality/Creativity: 5

Style/Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 5

Total: 20

Comments: I absolutely loved this one. The over-all tone of this poem suits the time it is set in. It flowed from beginning to end, it held my interest, and combined battle with romance.

 

The Ballad of the New Player -(Razia)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 5

Originality/Creativity: 3

Style/Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 3

Total: 15

Comments: Very cute, easy to follow, good flow. We all can relate to this "newbie"!

 

Eternal Lands Poem -(Cho-yun)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 3

Originality/Creativity: 2

Style/Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 2

Total: 9

Comments: It didn't always make sense to me. The grammar, punctuation, and word selections need work.

 

Just a Little Poem-Eternal Lands -(Jezebelle)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 4

Style/Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 5

Total: 18

Comments: I love the upbeat happy tone of this poem, and I definitely relate to it. It needs punctuation,though.

 

Mother Nature -(Spruit)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 3

Style/Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 3

Total: 13

Comments: Needs punctuation. It made me laugh, it's a fun tale of mother nature.

 

The Creature Who Wanders Around Whitestone -(Spruit)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 4

Style/Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 4

Total: 16

Comments: Good flow, the tale is easy to follow and understand. It needs more punctuation though.

 

Shivar's Poem -(Wildcard)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 5

Style/Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 4

Total: 17

Comments: What is there to say except LOL!!!

 

I Have Your Bag at the Beam, My Friend -(foncEmerlin)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 5

Style/Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 5

Total: 19

Comments: Excellent flow, a story we all can relate to and understand. Needs punctuation.

 

These Eternal Lands -(foncEmerlin)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 4

Style/Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 4

Total: 17

Comments: Needs punctuation. (Minor point: WSC is actually Whitestone City, (not castle) and still not to be confused with the entire Whitestone/Lakeside map.)

 

Rivan Warriors Poem -(Cho-yun)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 2

Originality/Creativity: 3

Style/Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 2

Total: 10

Comments: There are no stops to breathe in this. It is an interesting story but unclear at times due to lack of punctuation and grammar...

 

SHORT STORIES

 

Whitestone City's Clash -(Greeknight5)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 4

Style/Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 3

Total: 14

Comments: The ending was too abrupt. I also would like to hear more about who's words came when the sky cleared. Otherwise, it was a very interesting story.

 

The Path of a Warrior -(Changeyourname)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 3

Originality/Creativity: 4

Style/Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 4

Total: 15

Comments: Grammar, punctuation, and paragraphing need work. However it is a well filled-out story, and will be very nice when cleaned up.

 

The Monster of the Ghealan Sea -(Alderan)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 5

Style/Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 5

Total: 19

Comments: Wonderful job. Needs a little work with run-ons, and quoting people. Well thought out, it kept my interest, and flowed very well.

 

Dream Come Truth -(Zoki)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 3

Originality/Creativity: 3

Style/Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 3

Total: 12

Comments: Spellchecker is easy to use and will really improve the flow of your story.

 

The Attack at Tarsengaard -(Zoki)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 3

Originality/Creativity: 4

Style/Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 3

Total: 13

Comments: I would like to see more about the person telling the story, and more about HOW you battled. I would also like to see more work put into spelling, it helps the story flow when the reader doesn't have to stop to figure out the correct word.

 

Reporting In -(ttlanhil)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 5

Originality/Creativity: 5

Style/Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 3

Total: 18

Comments: Greater distinction between the dialogue and the narration (Maybe italics for the narration, or put a line between) would make for a better flow to the story since that would make it more obvious you are switching.

 

PineAppleBob, the Grue Hunter -(ttlanhil)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 5

Style/Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 4

Total: 18

Comments: Cute story, only complaints are some capitalization issues, and a couple punctuation issues.

 

A History of Enchanted Jewelry -(ttlanhil)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 5

Originality/Creativity: 5

Style/Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 4

Total: 18

Comments: I enjoyed the diary section greatly, I would like to see more of the history of the jewelry told in that manner, with less "history book" style.

 

Kalenthro the Troll Slayer

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 5

Style/Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 5

Total: 19

Comments: Excellent story, great imagery. I'd like to see you continue another story about the stolen gloves.

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Reporting In -(ttlanhil)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 2

Style/Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 1

Total: 9

Comments: I don't know what it was about this story but it didn't seem very creative or interesting for that matter. Perhaps try using better wording next time.

 

Pineapplebob -(ttlanhil)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 3

Style/Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 3

Total: 13

Comments: I must admit, I got a chuckle out of this. Pretty creative but the best wording was not always used]

 

Enchated Jewelery -(ttlanhil)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 5

Style/Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 4

Total: 17

Comments: I really enjoyed this story, it was a very creative and an original way of giving the history. The one thing I didn't like was the way you gave the dates, it didn't flow as well with them.

 

A Rabbit's Life - Poem -(ttlanhil)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 5

Originality/Creativity: 5

Style/Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 5

Total: 20

Comments: Haha this was perfect! It had an awesome flow and it was a great choice of wording! I must applaud you.

 

Reflections of the Meditatting Pool - Poem -(ttlanhil)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 2

Style/Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 2

Total: 11

Comments: Very peaceful poem but also kind of boring. Nicely written howevr.

 

The Buzzing Bumblebee - Song -(ttlanhil)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 4

Style/Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 4

Total: 16

Comments: Nice song. Could be one of those that could get stuck in your head all day if you heard the music to go with it :)

 

A Poem, A Poem -(Ogle)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 1

Originality/Creativity: 2

Style/Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 1

Total: 6

Comments: Let's see, there is no punctuation and proper grammar wasn't used (ie n00b). Some of the wording could be better and it didn't flow that well.

 

The bunny who could -(Sirrobin)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 2

Originality/Creativity: 4

Style/Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 3

Total: 12

Comments: There we many spelling, grammar, and punctuation errors. This piece was very creative however. I really liked B.A.N., nice addition

 

What of Foxes -(Sirrobin)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 4

Style/Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 3

Total: 14

Comments: Pretty short but had a nice rhyme scheme. The very last line was just kinda stupid though

 

The curse of the castle -(Cho_yun)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 5

Originality/Creativity: 2

Style/Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 3

Total: 13

Comments: This story goes agains't the Vermor castle storyline being written. You did a very good job explaining it but isn't as original as others.

 

For Love and Honor... Ode of the Warrior Maiden - Poem -(Kalhan)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 5

Originality/Creativity: 5

Style/Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 5

Total: 20

Comments: This story was absolutely perfect. Just the right amount of words and creativity. Also it wasn't dragged out. EXCELLENT job

 

White Stone City's clash -(Greeknight5)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 3

Style/Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 2

Total: 13

Comments: Decent story but nothing to get excited about. The names were creative but the storyline kind of clashes with others. Be careful on how you use gods.

 

Path of a warrior -(Changeyourname)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 3

Originality/Creativity: 5

Style/Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 5

Total: 18

Comments: I really liked this. The only thing that hurt you was your punctuation and grammar mistakes.

 

The Monster of Ghealean Sea -(Alderan)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 5

Originality/Creativity: 4

Style/Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 4

Total: 18

Comments: Very good job, I liked your word usage and the storyline. Great job.

 

Shivar Poem -(Wildcard)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 4

Style/Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 5

Total: 18

Comments: Very funny! Great use of the word shivar sounding like shiver.

 

I have your bag at beam my friend - poem -(foncemerlin)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 5

Style/Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 5

Total: 19

Comments: Lol we've all been there. Great poem. Next time pay a little more attention to your spell and grammar

 

These Eternal Lands -(foncemerlin)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 4

Style/Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 3

Total: 14

Comments: It was ok but some of it was just based on personal experience and not a wide opinion. FYI wsc = white stone city not castle ;)

 

Just a little Poem -(Jezebelle)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 4

Style/Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 4

Total: 16

Comments: Nicely written. It had a good ending because technically it is the end even though its just the begginning (if that made sense :P )

 

Kalenthro the Troll Slayer -(monkeyki)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 5

Originality/Creativity: 5

Style/Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 5

Total: 19

Comments: This was a great job. The only thing I didn't like was a few of the sentence were't as structured as I would have liked them. Other than that, you did an awesome job.

 

The creature who wanders around white stone - Poem -(spruit)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 5

Originality/Creativity: 4

Style/Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 5

Total: 18

Comments: Very nice, good way of revealing the villian.

 

Mother Nature - Poem -(spruit)

Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation, etc: 4

Originality/Creativity: 4

Style/Skill-at-writing: 3

Judge's Bias/personal liking: 3

Total: 14

Comments: Some of the rhymes did not go well together. Perhaps try using a syllable scheme as well? It would probably flow better

 

 

There we go, i think that was all of mine :-D. Good luck everyone.

Edited by Lord_Vermor

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Just a reminder to the judges who have not completed judging their entries that judging will continue until monday June 6th.

 

My entries:

Night of the Shadowcastor

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 3

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Overall: 15

 

Comments: A great work! That english isn't your primary language and you produced such a great story speaks a lot for you. I hope to see more stories from you in the future. Some grammar/spelling mistakes were noticed.

 

 

 

A Look at the Gods and the Overdiety

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 5

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing: 5

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 5

Overall: 19

 

Comments: The only mistake i noticed was that "Mortos seems to have abandonned his sway", though Mortos placed a curse. And I am not entirely sure as to when tirnym was sacked (i believe angelodante was working on a story about such things). After that I loved it and found it pretty much spelling/grammatic error free.

 

 

Word of the King

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation: 2

Originality / Creativity: 2

Style / Skill-at-writing: 2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 3

Overall: 9

 

Comments I am in accord with brom on this one. However, i did enjoy it very much. I'm not entire sure how hot dogs fit in with ogres and EL yet... A little work and you'll have a great poem

 

 

 

Just a Little Poem

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:4

Originality / Creativity: 5

Style / Skill-at-writing: 4

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 5

Overall:18

 

Comments I enjoyed it very much, and think it well suits the game!

 

Kalenthro the Troll Slayer

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:4

Originality / Creativity: 5

Style / Skill-at-writing:5

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 5

Overall:19

 

Comments: A very good tale. Though, it needs to be clean up and polished a bit. The run on sentences tended to be the major offendor. That can be worked on easily enough, though.

 

 

The Creature Who Wanders Around White Stone

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:3

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing:4

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Overall:15

 

Comments: Very enjoyable. Though i'm not too familliar with poems, i think this one needs some punctuation. It did not seem to have any resting points.

 

Mother Nature

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:4

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing:3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Overall: 14

 

Comments: So sad...yet so true :blink:. Stupid mother nature. I enjoyed it, though it did not seem as well put together as the last one.

 

 

Reporting In

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:2

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing:3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Overall: 12

 

Comments I get the feeling that this story was made to fit EL due to kobolds not actually being in the game. However, i did enjoy reading about the race. In the beginning i was unsure of which race i was reading about. That and i was not all that comfortable with the paragraph layout. All things that can be worked on, though.

 

 

PineAppleBob, The Grue Hunter

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:3

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing:3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 5

Overall: 15

 

Comments: Despite the akward paragraph layout. I enjoyed this one very much. Very insiteful to what really happens around raven so often. A few things can be worked on

 

 

 

Enchanted Jewelry

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:4

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing:5

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Overall: 17

 

Comments: The diary/journal format used was plus. It will work very well in-game. The dates are kind of difficult to follow, however that is understandable due to the uncertainty about that subject. I enjoyed how enlightening it was.

 

 

 

Eternal Lands Poem

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:1

Originality / Creativity: 2

Style / Skill-at-writing:2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 2

Overall: 7

 

Comments: I'm not too sure about your wording. Especially "For nothing was never right", that is a double negative. Your punctuation was off a bit as well.

 

 

 

Rivan Warriors Poem

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:2

Originality / Creativity: 3

Style / Skill-at-writing:1

Judge's Bias / personal liking:3

Overall: 9

 

Comments: Props to you for your dedication to your guild. However there are a few spelling mistakes, and with exception of the fisst 3 lines it felt like my lines slipped off the page due to lack of punctuation. This speaks worse for the style than the punctuation.

 

 

 

Dream Come Truth

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:3

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing:3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Overall: 14

 

Comments: I enjoyed the explanation of the tags and the GM. However your grammar needs a bit of work and there are some spelling errors.

 

 

 

The Attack at Tarsengaard

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:2

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing:2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 3

Overall: 11

 

Comments: I like the idea. However, this needs to be expounded upon. There is not much detail which says a lot about your style. I also think this is a good opportunity to explain the Armored male gobo that spawns in the cemetary.

 

 

 

He is Just a Noob

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:2

Originality / Creativity: 2

Style / Skill-at-writing:2

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 2

Overall: 8

Comments: Not much originality or creativity here seeing as how you have already wrote about noobs before. I'm not sure if it is derogatory or not, but i get the feeling it isn't (both poems). However, it could be misconstrued as being that way.

 

 

 

Gemlight Still

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:3

Originality / Creativity: 5

Style / Skill-at-writing:5

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 5

Overall: 18

 

Comments: Great detail. I little more punctuation would perfect this poem. I really enjoyed it.

 

 

 

The Ballad of the New Player

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:5

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing:4

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 4

Overall: 17

 

Comments: A very good ballad. Still a little cautious of the "newbie/noob" term as it most often has a bad rap. Would be a great candidate for a book in a tavern, though.

 

 

 

Excerpts From The Truescrolls

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:4

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing:5

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 5

Overall: 18

 

Comments I'm a big fan of referrences to guilds. I realize this was a name for a god in the story, but I can't help but make the connection to Derin's guild Brotherhood of Bane. To me Bane (the god) is an allegory for the guild.

 

 

 

The Lodge of Land

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:5

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing:5

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 5

Overall: 19

 

Comments: The only problem i had with this one is that the god's removed themselves from having direct contact with mortals after the great war and curse being placed. This can be worked around, however.

 

 

 

The War of the Valley

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:4

Originality / Creativity: 5

Style / Skill-at-writing:4

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 5

Overall: 18

 

Comments: A few grammar and spelling things to be changed. I think the switching back and forth was a great idea...however a bit over done for the shortness of the story.

 

 

 

Eternal Lands Pwns

Spelling / Grammar / Punctuation:2

Originality / Creativity: 4

Style / Skill-at-writing:3

Judge's Bias / personal liking: 2

Overall:11

 

Comments: Though individual opinions differ widely, i do not think a rap song accurately represents EL. A grammar and spelling mistakes, though most were intentional.

Edited by Quinticus

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Um...can judging be extended? Sorry but I just don't get a lot of free time anymore. I don't know if i'll be done by monday.

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Great! :ph34r: All that's left is to wait for Quinticus to finish. Now that I've left a backlog of work for the people involved in Quests to do, I can come back to Storylines for a while.

 

I've already compiled an almost-complete list of results. Once Quinticus posts his final scores, we can close the contest and announce the winners.

 

-Lyn-

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My list is fulfilled. Sorry I was the last...been bogged down trying to get a guild map ready for upcomming update. :) Big maps are difficult to do on ones own.

 

I'm excited to review the results. Think they will be ready by friday? If so we can make the announcement then. Lyanna if you need any help with the tallying, let me know.

 

Also Roja how are we working getting the prizes you have dedicated? Are you going to pass them to me to hand out or are we working that differently?

 

I have managed to dig up quite a few more prizes and i am confident that everyone will get one. So I will probably be contacting each participant individually to give them the prizes they have won. As soon as the results are in I will be work up the list of prizes and respective winners.

 

Thanks for all your guys' help!

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Okay, I'll start closing the contest now (or in about an hour, when I finish the results list). Quint, you'd better start sorting out the prizes.

 

Oops, it looks like Roja missed out one. I'll PM her.

 

-Lyn-

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