cho-yun Report post Posted May 24, 2005 (edited) He is just a NOOB I am just a newbie And no one wants to help me I can’t understand why anyone doesn’t help me Chorus Oh he's just a Newbie Everyone is scared of him No one will help him just because he’s a NOOB I walk through a winter-wonderland I just want to know how to eat and No one will tell me how to fight Chorus I suddenly walk into a map I then find myself in hell And no one will help me out Chorus I just want help (he just wants help) I just wanna play (wanna play) Oh please just help me (help him) Note i was told it had to be 15 lines Edited May 25, 2005 by cho-yun Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Quinticus Report post Posted May 24, 2005 Yup and it has been noted. Thank you for participating! Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Brom Report post Posted May 25, 2005 (edited) This one is small enough, Ill just bold what I did. you can take this one if you want. I am just a newbie And no one wants to help me I can’t understand why anyone doesn’t help me Chorus Oh he's just a Newbie Everyone is scared of him No one will help him just because he’s a NOOB I walk through a winter-wonderland I just want to know how to eat but No one will tell me how to fight (comment, why not complete your statement...eat/fight It just sounds strange, I recommend replacing the "but" with "and") Chorus I suddenly walk into/onto (up to you) to a map I then find myself in hell And no one will help me out Chorus I just want help (he just wants help) I just wanna play (wanna play) Oh please just help me (help him) (you might want to have more of a close/conclusion to the story, like, he finds channel 1 ) Edited May 25, 2005 by EWQ222 Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Learner Report post Posted May 25, 2005 want to have more of a close/conclusion to the story, like, he finds channel 1 )[/b] 164614[/snapback] I think a better conclusion is him going back to runescape. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Quinticus Report post Posted May 25, 2005 Oh did he leave? If he did, i can remove from the list of entries. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Learner Report post Posted May 25, 2005 Oh did he leave? If he did, i can remove from the list of entries. 164639[/snapback] I was talking about a conclusion to the song, not that anyone actually left. Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
cho-yun Report post Posted May 25, 2005 i'll never leave this game Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
ttlanhil Report post Posted June 10, 2005 (edited) This song has been selected for a ttlanhil's choice award! cho-yun has selected a mirror cloak for the prize Edited June 12, 2005 by ttlanhil Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
